Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence answering the question (yes/no and frequency), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and avoid confusing phrases. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' correctly to contrast ideas.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. I usually buy a new pair once or twice a year because I already have many pairs. However, I do enjoy shopping when I need something special.

提案: Give a direct answer and then a clear example. Fix grammar and use specific details (when, what type, why). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to explain your experience.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. For example, last year I bought a pair of casual sneakers from an online store because they were on sale. However, I sometimes worry about fit and appearance when buying shoes without trying them on.

提案: Answer with a clear estimate or range, then explain reasons briefly. Use correct sentence structure and vocabulary for amounts (e.g., 'around $50 to $100'). Use linking words like 'because' to justify your preference.

例: I usually spend around $50 to $100 on a pair of shoes. I prefer to spend more on quality because good shoes last longer and are more comfortable. Occasionally I will spend more for a special occasion.

提案: Begin with a clear direct statement of preference, then give concise reasons and one specific example. Use correct grammar and organized linking words like 'because' and 'although' to show contrast.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I plan to work in fashion and appearance matters to me. However, I also consider comfort, so I usually choose stylish shoes that are not too uncomfortable for daily wear.

× I don't have a buy a lot of shoes because when I about expensive shoes I can wear like a pipe here.

✓ I don't buy a lot of shoes because when I think about expensive shoes I feel like I can't afford them.

Multiple issues: 'have a buy' is incorrect verb structure (26: sentence structure errors) and 'when I about' misses verb 'think' (6: present tense issue). The phrase 'I can wear like a pipe here' is unclear and likely intends 'I feel like I can't afford them' (26). Suggest using clear verbs and correct word order: subject + verb + object, and appropriate verb 'think' after 'when I'. Use 'can't afford them' for meaning.

× it's not that important for I do have a lots of shoes.

✓ it's not that important because I do have a lot of shoes.

Singular and plural issue: 'a lots of shoes' is incorrect; use 'a lot of shoes' or 'many shoes'. Also 'for I do have' is wrong connector; use 'because' for reason (16: conjunction issue). Suggest: 'because I have a lot of shoes.'

× Yes, I have bought a it's some not important should be high heels.

✓ Yes, I have bought some shoes online, but I don't usually buy high heels.

Sentence structure errors: 'a it's some not important should be high heels' is ungrammatical. Correct by separating ideas: state purchase and preference. Use 'have bought' (present perfect) correctly to refer to past experience and 'don't usually buy' to express habit.

× So even I bought something on the Internet I can't match for my opportunities and I can see like the same on the Internet.

✓ So even if I buy something on the Internet, it may not suit my needs, and I often see the same styles online.

Sentence structure and word choice errors: 'even I bought' should be 'even if I buy' to express conditional/habit (6: present tense issue). 'match for my opportunities' is incorrect collocation; use 'suit my needs' or 'fit me'. 'I can see like the same' should be 'I often see the same'. Suggest using 'even if' + present tense for general situations and correct verbs/collocations.

× It is very critical because when you bought a new shoes, you have to focus there.

✓ It is very important because when you buy new shoes, you have to focus on them.

Past tense issue: 'when you bought' should be present or zero conditional 'when you buy' for general truth (6: present tense issue as well). Also article/plural errors: 'a new shoes' should be 'new shoes' (22: article errors and 1: singular/plural). 'focus there' incorrect preposition; use 'focus on them' (11: prepositions).

× How can you? How much do you ever and where do you ever this shoes?

✓ How can you? How much do you usually spend and where do you buy these shoes?

Singular/plural and word choice: 'this shoes' should be 'these shoes' (1). 'How much do you ever' and 'where do you ever this shoes' are ungrammatical; use 'How much do you usually spend' and 'where do you buy these shoes' to ask about cost and purchase location. 'Ever' is inappropriate here.

× So I prefer some expensive one because this is important too.

✓ So I prefer somewhat expensive ones because that is important too.

Quantifier and noun agreement: 'some expensive one' is awkward; use 'somewhat expensive ones' or 'more expensive ones' depending on meaning (14). Also 'this is important too' is vague; 'that is also important' clarifies. Ensure number agreement between preference and noun.

× I prefer the fashionable shoes because in the future I want to be a fashion designer, so it's not important for me.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because in the future I want to be a fashion designer, so appearance is important to me.

Sentence structure and word choice: 'the fashionable shoes' unnecessary definite article; use 'fashionable shoes' (17: definite article). 'so it's not important for me' contradicts context; likely intended 'so appearance is important to me.' Clarify meaning and use correct articles.

× How can you wear and how it's comfortable?

✓ How you can wear them and whether they're comfortable?

Incorrect use of pronouns/prepositions and sentence structure: 'How can you wear and how it's comfortable?' is ungrammatical. Use 'how you can wear them' and 'whether they're comfortable' to ask about wearability and comfort. This fixes pronoun reference and question form (12: pronouns and 26: structure).

× It's in my opinion it's important. Perspective is how they are looks.

✓ In my opinion, it's important. The perspective is how they look.

Sentence structure and verb form: 'It's in my opinion it's important' is redundant; use 'In my opinion, it's important.' 'how they are looks' mixes auxiliary and main verb; correct to 'how they look.' Also use 'the perspective' if referring to viewpoint. Fix word order and verb form (10: present participle confusion and 26).