Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clearer: give a concise topic sentence then one or two supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., tense, articles, plural forms) and avoid repetition. Use linking words if adding details (for example, “because” or “so”). Try to keep to 2–4 sentences and use more precise vocabulary like “often,” “comfortable,” and “good quality.”

例: Yes, I like buying shoes; I usually buy them once or twice a year. I prefer comfortable, high-quality shoes because I wear them a lot and want them to last.

提案: Answer directly and complete the thought. Use correct expressions for online shopping (e.g., “bought online” or “shopped online”) and give a clear advantage and disadvantage using linking words such as “however” and “because.” Avoid hesitations and unfinished sentences. Keep it to 2–3 coherent sentences.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once or twice, and I find it very convenient because there is a wide selection. However, sometimes sizes don’t fit well, so I prefer to try new brands in a store first.

提案: Be specific about amounts or a clear general range, and explain the reason briefly. Fix grammar (use articles and plural forms) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “so” or “because” to connect reason and amount. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences.

例: I don’t spend a lot on shoes — usually around $50–$80 per pair — because I focus on comfortable, good-quality shoes that last longer. I typically buy a new pair once or twice a year.

提案: Give a clear preference with a brief reason and a supporting example. Correct sentence structure and word choice (e.g., “sneakers are comfortable,” “suit me” → “suit me”). Use a linking word like “because” and avoid contradictions. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day. For example, I usually wear sneakers since they suit me and make it easy to walk around for long periods.

× Yes, sometime I lie buying shoe it's about once or twice a year.

✓ Yes, sometimes I like buying shoes; it's about once or twice a year.

Errors: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency); 'lie' is a misspelling of 'like'; 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match general reference. Also the clause needed punctuation and 'it's' to join two ideas. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' for habits, 'like' for preference, and pluralize countable nouns when speaking in general (buying shoes).

× Umm I prefer buying comfortable shoe and good quality is comfortable and suit.

✓ Umm, I prefer buying comfortable shoes of good quality because they are comfortable and suitable.

Errors: 'comfortable shoe' should be plural 'comfortable shoes'; 'good quality is comfortable and suit' is ungrammatical: use 'of good quality' and 'suitable' not 'suit'. Also redundancy: 'comfortable' repeated; rephrase to 'because they are comfortable and suitable.' Suggestion: use 'of good quality' to describe nouns and 'suitable' as the adjective form; keep noun plurality consistent.

× Yes, I have virtual ally. Once or twice is very convenient.

✓ Yes, I have, virtually. Buying online once or twice is very convenient.

Errors: 'virtual ally' is incorrect word split; should be 'virtually' (adverb) or better phrase 'bought online' if referring to past experience. The original lacks clear verb; corrected to 'Buying online once or twice is very convenient.' Suggestion: use 'virtually' correctly or state 'I have bought shoes online' to use present perfect for experience.

× However, sometime it's uh, sometime buying online can.

✓ However, sometimes buying online can be inconvenient.

Errors: 'sometime it's uh, sometime buying online can' is incomplete and repetitive. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' and the verb 'can' needs a complement (e.g., 'be inconvenient'). Suggestion: complete the clause with an adjective or phrase describing the issue.

× I don't prefer spend much spend money much onto because I prefer buying uh comfortable shoe and good quality.

✓ I don't prefer to spend much money because I prefer buying comfortable, good-quality shoes.

Errors: 'don't prefer spend' requires 'to spend' (infinitive) or rephrase 'prefer not to spend'; 'spend money much' incorrect word order; 'onto' unnecessary; 'comfortable shoe' should be plural; 'good quality' used as noun phrase needs hyphen 'good-quality' when before noun. Suggestion: use 'prefer to' + verb or 'prefer buying...' and correct word order and pluralization.

× I usually buy shoe once.

✓ I usually buy shoes once a year.

Errors: 'buy shoe' should be 'buy shoes' (plural) and 'once' needs a time expression like 'once a year' to be clear. Suggestion: include the time period and pluralize the noun for general frequency statements.

× Comfortable is important to because I walk a lot.

✓ Comfort is important because I walk a lot.

Errors: 'Comfortable is important to' is incorrect; 'comfortable' is an adjective and needs a noun or verb structure. Use 'comfort' (noun) or say 'Being comfortable is important.' Also remove unnecessary 'to.' Suggestion: choose the correct form (noun vs adjective) to fit the sentence structure.

× I prefer sneaker is uncomfortable.

✓ I prefer sneakers because they are comfortable.

Errors: 'I prefer sneaker is uncomfortable' is contradictory and ungrammatical. Likely intended 'I prefer sneakers; they are comfortable.' Use plural 'sneakers' for general preference and provide correct linking verb 'are' and adjective 'comfortable.' Suggestion: separate ideas or combine with a relative clause: 'I prefer sneakers, which are comfortable.'

× Shoe is very suit to me and convenient to walk around.

✓ Shoes suit me very well and are convenient for walking around.

Errors: 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes' when speaking generally; 'suit' needs correct verb form 'suit me' and add adverb 'very well'; 'convenient to walk around' should be 'convenient for walking around.' Suggestion: pluralize general nouns and use correct verb forms and prepositions ('for walking').