Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子不够连贯且语法错误较多。回答应先直接回答频率（如“About once a year”），然后用1–2句具体说明原因。注意动词、冠词和复数形式的正确使用，并使用连接词使表达更自然，例如“because”或“so”。尽量控制在最多5句内。

例: I usually buy a pair of shoes about once a year because I don't wear them out quickly. I value comfort most, so I choose sneakers that fit my feet well so I can walk long distances without pain.

提案: 回答直接但有重复和数字表述不够准确。应保持简洁并避免夸张数字或重复。用连接词（e.g., “because”, “so”）把观点和例子连起来，并补充一两个具体细节（如退货体验或尺码问题）。控制在最多5句。

例: Yes, I have. I often buy shoes online because they are usually cheaper and there are frequent discounts. However, I always check the return policy in case the size doesn't fit.

提案: 回答包含价格范围和理由，但表达有语法和衔接问题。建议先给出明确的价格范围，然后解释原因并用连接词如“because”或“as”说明不同季节和材料的影响。可加入具体例子（例如运动鞋 vs. 靴子）。控制在最多5句。

例: I usually spend between $20 and $60 on a pair of shoes, depending on the style. For example, I buy inexpensive sandals for summer but invest a bit more in warm boots for winter because of the materials and durability I need.

提案: 观点明确且理由清楚，但有语法和表达细节问题（如“This is what comfortable shoes has”不正确）。建议使用自然连贯的句子来对比两者，使用连接词（e.g., “because”, “while”）并给出具体例子或情境说明何时会选择时尚鞋或舒适鞋。保持简洁。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often walk a lot and need good support. While fashionable shoes might look nice, they are usually more expensive and less practical for everyday use.

× I don't about one year one pair.

✓ I buy about one pair a year.

该句缺少动词和正确的句子结构，原句“I don't about one year one pair”不完整且语序混乱。建议使用完整的主语+谓语+宾语结构；若表达“我大约每年买一双”，可以说“I buy about one pair a year.” 简洁明了，动词(buy)补全句子意思。

× I think the most important function of shoe is comfortable to let our feet fit in well so that we can use this sneaker or shoes to walk to far away places.

✓ I think the most important function of a shoe is to be comfortable so that our feet fit well and we can use it to walk to faraway places.

原句中用法混乱：'function of shoe'缺少冠词，'comfortable'作为形容词不能直接作为完整不定式表目的，'fit in well'应为'fit well'，'this sneaker or shoes'数和代词不一致。建议：为名词加冠词(a shoe)，用不定式表达目的(to be comfortable)，修正搭配(fit well)，统一代词和名词(it/they)，并将'far away'合并为'faraway'或用'far away'但放在动词后。说明句子要保持一致性与正确搭配。

× Yes I have. I'm glad to say that it is much cheaper to buy shoes online than in shoe shops because they are often 70% off. 80% off on online shops so I can get my beloved shoes more easily.

✓ Yes, I have. I'm glad to say that it is much cheaper to buy shoes online than in shoe shops because they are often 70% off, sometimes even 80% off on online shops, so I can get my favorite shoes more easily.

需要注意标点和连接词来使句子更通顺；原句“70% off. 80% off on online shops”断开且表达重复。建议用连词把原因和结果连接，并用正确的短语表达折扣(percent off)与频率(sometimes even)。同时将'beloved'替换为更常用的'favorite'在此语境下更自然。

× It depends from $20 to $60.00.

✓ It depends on the price, from $20 to $60.

固定搭配是'depend on'而不是'depend from'。原句还缺少关于名词（price）的说明，建议补充并把区间放在句末或用'from...to...'结构。

× Some shoes are for summer while others are for winters because of the differences of their materials, so their prices are varied from each other.

✓ Some shoes are for summer while others are for winter because of differences in their materials, so their prices vary from one another.

'for winters'应为'for winter'（季节名词通常用单数或不加复数），'differences of their materials'应为'differences in their materials'，此外'prices are varied from each other'是不自然的表达，正确用法是'prices vary from one another'或'some prices vary'. 建议注意介词搭配和主谓搭配。

× I will choose comfort shoes to wear but not the expensive ones.

✓ I will choose comfortable shoes to wear, but not the expensive ones.

'comfort shoes'应使用形容词'comfortable'修饰名词'shoes'。原句需要形容词形式而不是名词。保持形容词修饰名词的正确形式。

× I'm not a person pursuing fashion, so I don't show much interest in fashionable shoes.

✓ I'm not a person who pursues fashion, so I don't show much interest in fashionable shoes.

需要使用关系从句或正确动词形式：'a person pursuing'虽然可接受但更自然的是'a person who pursues fashion'。建议使用关系代词'who'引导定语从句以明确主语和动作。

× On the other hand, fashionable shoes are both expensive and sometimes don't fit me well.

✓ On the other hand, fashionable shoes are often expensive and sometimes don't fit me well.

'are both expensive and sometimes don't fit me well'结构上使用'both'暗示两个并列形容，但第二部分是从句，建议去掉'both'或改成并列形容。使用'often'更合适表达频率。

× This is what comfortable shoes has.

✓ This is what comfortable shoes have.

主语'comfortable shoes'为复数，谓语动词应与之保持一致，使用复数动词'have'而不是单数'has'。这是主谓一致问题，需注意名词单复数与动词形式一致。