Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говоря по-русски: начните с более естественного вступления и прямо ответьте на вопрос, затем дайте одно-две конкретные детали. Избегайте повторов и грамматических ошибок (например, «in my point of view», «that's used»). Также сократите ответ до максимум 3–4 предложений и используйте связки (for example, because) для логичности. Пример улучшений: сказать, как часто (раз в месяц), почему (любите уникальные пары), и добавить конкретный пример (тип обуви или случай).

例: Yes, I do. I usually buy shoes about once a month because I like to find unique pairs that match my outfits. For example, I often look for casual white trainers that go well with jeans and a jacket, so I take my time to choose the right style and fit.

提案: Говоря по-русски: используйте правильные времена (I prefer to buy / I have bought) и устраните повторы («for my for my»). Структурируйте ответ: сначала подтвердите, затем приведите 2–3 конкретные причины, используя связки (because, for example). Можно упомянуть опыт возврата или проверки размеров. Старайтесь кратко и ясно выражать мысли.

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there is a wide selection of brands and colors, and it is easy to filter by my size. For example, I usually check customer reviews and size charts to make sure the shoes will fit before I order.

提案: Говоря по-русски: давайте конкретную, чёткую информацию и используйте корректные структуры (I usually spend about $100). Избегайте сомнений в речи («maybe spent near 100 wait one»). Объясните причину бюджета и добавьте связку (because, so) и пример (тип обуви и цена).

例: I usually spend about $100 on shoes each time. I think that price is reasonable because I buy good-quality pairs, so I often compare prices across stores to find the best deal.

提案: Говоря по-русски: сначала назовите предпочтение кратко, затем объясните причину и добавьте контрастную мысль с связкой (however, but). Устраните грамматические ошибки и странные выражения («different strange look at me», «I'm still handsome today»). Приводите конкретные ситуации (долгие прогулки, работа), чтобы обосновать выбор.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I like to look stylish and make a good impression. However, I also need comfortable shoes for walking long distances every day, so I often choose stylish designs with good cushioning and support.

× In my point of view, I like buying shoes.

✓ From my point of view, I like buying shoes.

The phrase 'In my point of view' is incorrect; the fixed expression is 'From my point of view' or 'In my opinion'. Use the appropriate preposition to sound natural.

× I buy shoes maybe once a month because I try to find unique shoes that that's used for my feet, for my clothes, and combine different types of clothes with these shoes.

✓ I buy shoes maybe once a month because I try to find unique shoes that fit my feet, match my clothes, and that I can combine with different outfits.

Multiple issues: 'that that's used for my feet' is ungrammatical and should be 'that fit my feet' (correct verb and form). 'for my clothes' should be 'match my clothes' (wrong preposition and verb). 'combine different types of clothes with these shoes' is awkward; use 'combine with different outfits'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel structure.

× I prefer to bought to buy shoes online because in marketplace I have a lot of various types of shoes with different colors and easily to find shoes for me for my for my size and I have a lot of brands there.

✓ I prefer to buy shoes online because in the marketplace I can find many different types and colors of shoes easily, find my size, and there are many brands available.

'Prefer to bought to buy' mixes past and infinitive incorrectly; use 'prefer to buy'. 'in marketplace' needs article 'the marketplace'. 'a lot of various types' is awkward; use 'many different types'. 'easily to find' is ungrammatical; use 'find ... easily' or 'can find ... easily'. Also make sentence clearer and parallel.

× As for me, I maybe spent near 100 wait one $100.00 of for different types of shoes.

✓ As for me, I maybe spend around $100 on different pairs of shoes.

Tense and word order errors: 'maybe spent' wrongly uses past tense; context asks usual spending so use present 'spend'. 'near 100 wait one $100.00 of' is garbled; use 'around $100'. Use 'on' to indicate expenditure and 'pairs of shoes' for clarity.

× I think it is not expensive, but it's not cheap and it is necessary to compare the price in with different types.

✓ I think it is not expensive, but it's not cheap, and it is necessary to compare prices of different types.

'compare the price in with different types' is incorrect preposition and phrasing. Use plural 'prices' and 'prices of different types' or 'prices from different brands'. Maintain parallel structure.

× I prefer fashionable shoes because I want to be a stylish.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because I want to be stylish.

'a stylish' is incorrect because 'stylish' is an adjective, not a noun; remove the article 'a'. Use 'be stylish'.

× I like when different strange look at me and say me that I'm still handsome today.

✓ I like when different people look at me and tell me that I'm still handsome today.

'different strange' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'different people' or 'strangers'. 'say me that' is incorrect; correct verb is 'tell me that'. Use appropriate noun and verb patterns.

× But to be honest, it is necessary to have a comfortable shoes because I I go I need to go for long distance every day.

✓ But to be honest, it is necessary to have comfortable shoes because I need to walk long distances every day.

Article and number agreement: 'a comfortable shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'comfortable shoes' or 'a comfortable shoe'. Redundant 'I I go I need to go' is incorrect; simplify to 'I need to walk long distances every day' for clarity and correct verb usage.