Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول تكوين جملة موضوعية واضحة في البداية ثم اشرح الأسباب بتفاصيل محددة وبترتيب منطقي. انتبه للأزمنة، والأشكال الصحيحة للأفعال، واستخدم عبارات ربط بسيطة مثل "because", "for example", أو "so" لجعل الإجابة أكثر تماسكاً. حافظ على طول الجملة أقل من خمس جمل وتجنب التكرار والعبارات غير الواضحة.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes about twice a year, for example at the start of the university term and for special events. I prefer to buy shoes when I need a fresh style or something more practical. Because I walk a lot, I often choose comfortable designs that are also fashionable.

提案: ركز على وضوح الفكرة واستخدم مفردات مناسبة لوصف المزايا (مثل "cheaper", "good value", "reliable") بدلاً من تعابير غير صحيحة. رتب الأفكار: ابدأ بجملة رئيسية، ثم اذكر الأسباب أو الأمثلة مع استخدام روابط مثل "because" و"for example". تأكد من نطق أسماء المواقع وكتابتها بشكل صحيح أو استخدم تعبيرات عامة إذا كنت غير متأكد.

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because they are usually cheaper and offer good value. Online stores also provide many styles and customer reviews, which help me choose. For example, I often buy from Shein because their prices are low and delivery is convenient.

提案: استخدم أرقام وقيم واضحة عند الحديث عن المال (مثلاً مبلغ بالعملة المتداولة أو نطاق سعري). صحح تركيب الجمل والأسماء (مثلاً "pair of shoes" وليس "pair of the shoes") وقدم سبباً محدداً لخياراتك مع أمثلة واضحة ومتسلسلة. استعمل روابط مثل "because" و"for example" لتوضيح السبب والنتيجة.

例: I usually spend about 20 dollars on a pair of shoes, although it depends on the brand. I prefer a brand called Boomer because their shoes are comfortable and have a simple, everyday style. For example, I buy their plain trainers for daily use because they match many outfits and feel supportive.

提案: ابدأ بجملة واضحة تُجيب عن السؤال مباشرة ثم اشرح السبب بتفاصيل محددة مثل المدة التي تمشيها أو الأنشطة التي تقوم بها. تجنب كلمات غير مفهومة أو أخطاء في تركيب الجملة. استخدم روابط بسيطة مثل "because" و"so" لتوضيح العلاقة بين السبب والنتيجة.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot around my university every day. Comfortable shoes support my feet and reduce tiredness, so I can study and move between classes without pain. Therefore I usually choose supportive trainers rather than fashionable heels.

× Yes, I like buy shoes.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes.

The verb 'like' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) when expressing a general preference. Use 'buying' instead of 'buy' to form a correct verb-complement structure.

× I usually buy them twice a year, for example when I start university and some time for it, because I want a new styles and useful item for these celebrate or especially events.

✓ I usually buy them twice a year, for example when I start university or for special events, because I want new styles and useful items.

Multiple issues: 'some time for it' is awkward and should be 'or for special events'; use plural 'styles' and 'items' to match meaning; 'celebrate' is incorrect form—use 'special' or 'celebratory' with 'events'. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× Yes, I usually buy the shoes online because they are we money choice and the price are good.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because they are a good value and the prices are reasonable.

Errors: 'the shoes' not needed—use general 'shoes'; 'we money choice' is incorrect—use 'a good value'; subject-verb agreement: 'price are' should be 'prices are' or 'the price is'. Use plural 'prices' or singular 'price' consistently.

× The also it is the equality sum of the website, it is very good.

✓ The website is reliable and offers consistent prices; it is very good.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to convey intended meaning: 'the website is reliable' and 'offers consistent prices'. Avoid redundant pronouns and incorrect nouns like 'equality sum'.

× For example, I bought the shoes usually from the Sheen.

✓ For example, I usually buy shoes from Shein.

Tense consistency: use present simple 'I usually buy' for habitual actions rather than past 'bought'. 'the Sheen' is incorrect name/article—use brand name 'Shein' without 'the'.

× I usually spend about 20 year money on the pair of the shoes.

✓ I usually spend about 20 dollars a year on a pair of shoes.

Clarify currency and time: '20 year money' is incorrect—use '20 dollars a year'. Use 'a pair of shoes' not 'the pair of the shoes' for general statement.

× I prefer the Boomer because they are comfortable and good style and so I often choose them for everyday wearing.

✓ I prefer the Boomers because they are comfortable and stylish, so I often choose them for everyday wear.

Agreement: if 'Boomer' is a brand/model pluralize to 'Boomers' to match 'they'. 'good style' should be 'stylish'. 'everyday wearing' is incorrect—use 'everyday wear'.

× For example, their design are simple and can you every day you are wearing.

✓ For example, their design is simple and you can wear them every day.

Subject-verb agreement: 'design' is singular so use 'is'. Sentence structure: reorder to 'you can wear them every day' to be grammatical and clear.

× I prefer the comfortable shoes because I usually walk a lot especially around my university so I choose these two supportive.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I usually walk a lot, especially around my university, so I choose ones that are supportive.

Articles/pronouns: 'the comfortable shoes' is too specific—use general 'comfortable shoes'. 'choose these two supportive' is ungrammatical; use 'ones that are supportive' to refer to shoes.

× The shoes and ABS feeds Ben and they stay comfortable during the day.

✓ They have good cushioning and stay comfortable during the day.

Original contains unintelligible fragments ('ABS feeds Ben'). Replace with clear description 'good cushioning' or 'good support'. Maintain plural subject 'they' to agree with 'stay'.