Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/singular, articles), and give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences. For example, use: “I don’t really enjoy buying shoes; I only buy them when necessary.” then add a reason or frequency: “I buy shoes roughly once every year because my current pairs last a long time.”

例: I don’t really enjoy buying shoes and only buy them when necessary. For example, I usually purchase new shoes about once a year because my current pairs are durable and still comfortable.

提案: Fix grammar and make the answer more natural and slightly more informative. Use a clear topic sentence and a linking word to give a brief reason. Correct verb forms and articles: “prefer to buy shoes in a physical shop.”

例: No, I haven’t bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on in a physical shop. For instance, I like checking the fit and material before buying.

提案: Organize and correct the sentences: start with a topic sentence, then give two specific examples with accurate grammar and linking words (e.g., “for example,” “whereas”). Use consistent currency format and avoid hesitations/pauses. Keep it within 3 sentences.

例: It depends on the type of shoe. For example, I might spend about 15 ringgit on simple sandals, whereas a branded pair of closed shoes could cost several hundred ringgit.

提案: Clarify preference and correct many grammar/word-choice errors. Use a topic sentence that states a balanced preference, and one supporting reason using linking words such as “because” or “however.” Keep it concise and natural (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because I want to look good without sacrificing comfort. However, if I had to choose one, I would pick comfort for everyday wear to avoid foot pain.

× I seldom buy shoe.

✓ I seldom buy shoes.

The noun 'shoe' should be plural because 'buy' without a determiner implies a general/indefinite plural; 'seldom buy shoes' expresses habit. Use plural nouns for general statements about items you purchase.

× I only buy when it is necessary and I need it.

✓ I only buy them when it is necessary and I need them.

Pronouns must agree in number with their antecedent. 'Shoes' is plural, so use plural pronouns 'them' instead of 'it'. Also adding 'when' before 'I need them' clarifies meaning.

× No, I have not bought shoes online because I prefer buy the shoe in a physical shop.

✓ No, I have not bought shoes online because I prefer buying shoes in a physical shop.

After 'prefer' use the gerund form 'buying' or the infinitive 'to buy'; here 'prefer buying' is natural. Also change 'the shoe' to plural 'shoes' for general reference. This fixes verb form and plural noun use.

× No, I have not bought shoes online because I prefer buy the shoe in a physical shop.

✓ No, I have not bought shoes online because I prefer to buy shoes in a physical shop.

Alternatively, use the infinitive 'to buy' after 'prefer'. Ensure 'shoes' is plural for general reference. This makes the tense and verb form correct.

× Well I would say it depends on the type of shoe I buy. If it is sandals I would spend, I might spend about. 15 ringgit.

✓ Well, I would say it depends on the type of shoe I buy. If they are sandals, I might spend about 15 ringgit.

Subjects and verbs must agree: 'sandals' (plural) requires 'they are'. Remove the misplaced comma and period; combine phrases to form a single coherent sentence. 'Might spend about 15 ringgit' expresses approximate amount.

× If it is a branded covered shoes I would spend like hundreds.

✓ If they are branded covered shoes, I would spend hundreds (of ringgit).

Use plural agreement ('they are') for 'shoes'. 'A' cannot be used with plural 'shoes'. 'Like' is informal and unnecessary; say 'I would spend hundreds' or 'I would spend hundreds of ringgit'. Add comma for clarity.

× I prefer fashionable and cold comfortable shoes because if I only choose a comfortable shoes eat my not look beautiful, but if I only choose fashionable shows it might not be comfortable for me.

✓ I prefer fashionable but comfortable shoes because if I only choose comfortable shoes I may not look good, but if I only choose fashionable shoes they might not be comfortable for me.

Multiple issues: use plural 'shoes' consistently; correct word order and choice ('fashionable but comfortable' or 'fashionable and comfortable'); replace incorrect words ('cold', 'eat', 'my', 'shows') with correct words. Use 'may' for possibility and 'they' to refer to 'shoes'. This corrects plurality, pronouns, word choice and sentence structure.