Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng ý: Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No + brief reason). Sửa lỗi từ vựng và phát âm của tên hàng (ví dụ 'Sue Sports' có thể là 'new sports shoes' hoặc 'Nike/Adidas'). Tránh câu mơ hồ như 'help spot to miss' — cần nêu rõ lợi ích (ví dụ: hỗ trợ khi thi đấu, bám sân tốt). Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu, dùng liên từ đơn giản như 'because' hoặc 'so' để mở rộng.

例: Yes, I do. I buy shoes quite often because I play football with my friends several times a week. I usually choose sports shoes from well-known brands because they provide good grip and ankle support, which helps prevent injuries. So I prefer buying shoes that are durable and comfortable for playing.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, dùng đúng từ (ví dụ 'shorts' vs 'shoes') và cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh: hãy nói trực tiếp về việc mua giày online, lý do cụ thể (tiện lợi, so sánh giá, lựa chọn đa dạng). Dùng liên từ như 'because' và 'and' để nối ý, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi thì (use present simple: 'I often buy').

例: Yes, I have. I often buy shoes online because it saves time and is usually cheaper. Also, online stores offer a wider selection and customer reviews, so I can compare styles and sizes before deciding. Therefore I find shopping online very convenient.

提案: Cải thiện khả năng diễn đạt con số và lý do cụ thể: Nên nói rõ đơn vị tiền tệ (ví dụ 'one million VND' hoặc 'around $50'), và giải thích vì sao chi tiền như vậy (chất lượng, thương hiệu, nhu cầu). Sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản, đầy đủ: chủ đề + thông tin + lý do. Tránh ngập ngừng và từ không đúng ('search' nên là 'shoes').

例: I usually spend about one million Vietnamese dong on a pair of shoes. I pay that much because I prefer good quality and durable shoes, especially for sports. So I’m willing to invest a bit more to make sure they last.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cô đọng ý: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng ('I prefer comfortable shoes') và nêu lý do cụ thể, tránh lặp từ ('comfortable' lặp). Dùng liên từ như 'because' và thêm một ví dụ ngắn hoặc so sánh để phong phú nội dung. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I play football regularly and need good support. Comfortable shoes reduce fatigue and lower the risk of injury, unlike purely fashionable shoes. So for me function is more important than style.

× I am really into buying shoes, especially Sue Sports because I often play football with my friends.

✓ I am really into buying shoes, especially Sports shoes, because I often play football with my friends.

Original uses 'Sue Sports' which seems to be a wrong product name; 'Sports shoes' is clearer. Also comma use is fine. Suggest using the correct noun phrase for the brand or type: 'sports shoes'.

× I want to buy it because it can help spot to miss.

✓ I want to buy them because they can help me avoid slipping.

The student used wrong pronouns ('it' for shoes -> plural 'them') and a nonsensical verb phrase 'help spot to miss.' Likely intended meaning is 'help me avoid slipping' or 'prevent me from missing the ball.' Use plural pronoun for shoes and a correct verb phrase: 'help me avoid slipping' or 'help me perform better.'

× Yes I have. I often buying shorts online because it help save time and save money.

✓ Yes, I have. I often buy shoes online because it helps save time and money.

Use base verb after 'often' (not 'buying'); 'shorts' is likely wrong item—should be 'shoes.' 'It' referring to buying should take singular verb 'helps.' Also add commas for clarity.

× Moreover, this is convenience and cheaper.

✓ Moreover, it is convenient and cheaper.

Use adjective 'convenient' instead of noun 'convenience.' Use 'it' to refer to buying online and 'cheaper' is fine in comparison; full phrase 'it is convenient and cheaper' is correct.

× I often spend once million to buy search because I want to buy a shoes Very, uh, very well.

✓ I often spend one million to buy shoes because I want to buy very good shoes.

'Once million' is incorrect; use 'one million.' 'Search' is wrong word; should be 'shoes.' Use no article before plural 'shoes.' 'Very well' is wrong collocation; use 'very good' to describe quality.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I often play football with my friends, which can help me feel relaxed and comfortable when I bring it.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I often play football with my friends, which helps me feel relaxed and comfortable when I wear them.

'Which can help' is acceptable but better 'which helps' to agree with present habit. 'Bring it' is wrong for wearing shoes; use 'wear them' with plural pronoun 'them' and correct verb 'wear.'