Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và rõ ràng trong câu trả lời: tránh lỗi như dùng thì sai (ví dụ 'must to'), số nhiều/số ít (shoe → shoes), và sắp xếp ý mạch lạc hơn. Nói trực tiếp vào câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn (Yes/No + lý do), tiếp theo cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất mua sắm (ví dụ: once a year). Sử dụng từ vựng đơn giản nhưng chính xác (save money, on necessities, afford). Hạn chế dài dòng không cần thiết để không vượt quá 5 câu.

例: I don't buy shoes often because I am a student and need to save money. I usually buy new shoes only when my old ones are worn out, so maybe once a year. I prefer to spend on necessities rather than fashion items.

提案: Cải thiện trật tự từ và dạng động từ, loại bỏ từ không cần thiết như 'And' ở đầu câu. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (“No, I haven’t bought shoes online.”), sau đó giải thích lý do với linking words (because, so) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: try them on for fit and comfort). Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng từ vựng phù hợp (quality, try them on, fit, comfort).

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online. I prefer visiting physical shops because I can try the shoes on and check their quality. If they fit well and feel comfortable, I usually buy them immediately.

提案: Nói rõ đơn vị tiền tệ và phạm vi giá theo cách chuẩn (ví dụ: 100,000 to 200,000 VND). Sử dụng cấu trúc câu trực tiếp: nêu con số rồi giải thích lý do. Tránh từ sai như 'down' hay 'exorbitant' nếu không dùng đúng ngữ cảnh. Thêm một cụm lí do rõ ràng (because I need to save money) và dùng từ phù hợp (expensive).

例: I usually spend about 100,000 to 200,000 Vietnamese dong on a pair of shoes. I keep costs low because I need to save money as a student and I don't want expensive footwear.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, tránh câu không rõ nghĩa. Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề: 'I prefer comfortable shoes.' Sau đó giải thích lý do với linking words (because, so) và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (e.g., I walk a lot, so comfort matters). Tránh từ sai hoặc dịch sát từ tiếng Việt (ví dụ 'first cinema shoe' không hợp lý). Dùng danh từ số nhiều 'shoes' và tính từ đúng 'comfortable'.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day. Comfortable shoes protect my feet and let me concentrate on my activities, so I choose comfort over fashion.

× I don't really like my shoes because I am a student so I don't have many much money.

✓ I don't really like buying shoes because I am a student so I don't have much money.

The student used 'many much' which is incorrect. Use 'much' with uncountable nouns like 'money'. Also 'like my shoes' is odd here; context asks about buying shoes, so 'like buying shoes' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'much' for uncountable nouns and choose the correct verb phrase.

× I must to save my money to each others.

✓ I must save my money for myself.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'must to' (should be 'must' + base verb) and 'to each others' is wrong. 'Each other' refers to reciprocal action; here the speaker means 'for myself' or 'for each other' is irrelevant. Suggestion: remove 'to' after 'must' and use appropriate phrase 'for myself'.

× So when it is really necessary I would buy the new shoe.

✓ So when it is really necessary, I will buy new shoes.

Using 'would' here is incorrect for a real future action; use 'will'. Also 'the new shoe' should be plural 'new shoes' or 'a new pair of shoes'. Suggestion: use 'will' for intention and correct noun number.

× And I have never bought shoes online, I often to go to physical shops to buy directly because I can access the quality of the shoe and I can try it.

✓ I have never bought shoes online; I often go to physical shops to buy them because I can assess the quality and try them on.

Errors: unnecessary 'And' at start, incorrect 'to' after 'often' ('often go' is correct), 'access the quality' should be 'assess the quality', 'buy directly' is awkward, and pronoun agreement (use 'them' for shoes). Also use 'try them on' for fitting. Suggestion: remove leading conjunction, do not use 'to' after 'often', use 'assess' and 'try on', and use appropriate pronouns.

× If it's suitable for me, I will buy it.

✓ If they are suitable for me, I will buy them.

Pronoun disagreement: 'shoes' is plural, so use 'they'/'them' and plural verb 'are'. 'It' is incorrect for shoes. Suggestion: match pronouns and verbs to plural nouns.

× I often spend about 100 to 200,000 down to buy my new shoes because I don't have to wear a exorbitant shoe.

✓ I often spend about 100,000 to 200,000 dong to buy new shoes because I don't want to wear expensive shoes.

Problems: number format and currency: place units correctly '100,000 to 200,000 dong'. 'Down' is wrong. 'I don't have to wear' is incorrect; likely 'I don't want to wear' or 'I don't have to wear expensive shoes' but context suggests preference: use 'don't want to wear expensive shoes'. 'Exorbitant shoe' is incorrect; use 'expensive shoes'. Suggestion: write currency properly, use 'want' for preference, use plural 'shoes'.

× MMM for me I prefer comfortable shoe because it is where it's making me.

✓ For me, I prefer comfortable shoes because they are comfortable and fit me well.

Errors: 'comfortable shoe' should be plural 'comfortable shoes'; 'it is where it's making me' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with clear reasons: 'they are comfortable and fit me well'. Suggestion: use plural nouns and clear adjective phrases.

× From satisfied and suitable for me unlike first cinema shoe.

✓ They make me feel satisfied and are suitable for me, unlike fashionable shoes.

Original fragment lacks subject and proper conjunctions. 'From satisfied' is incorrect; use 'They make me feel satisfied'. 'First cinema shoe' seems to attempt 'fashionable shoes' or 'fancy shoes'—replace with 'fashionable shoes'. Suggestion: provide complete clause with subject and clear comparison; use correct vocabulary ('fashionable' or 'fancy').