Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的で要点を伝えていますが、文法ミスと冗長表現が目立ちます。より自然にするために主語・動詞の一致を直し、理由をつなぐ接続詞を使い、具体性を少し加えてください（例：いつ・どんな状況で買うのか）。また、文の数は3～4文にまとめると良いです。

例: Not really. I find buying shoes a bit of a hassle, so I only shop for them about once a year. Usually I replace shoes when they become worn out or uncomfortable, rather than buying new ones frequently.

提案: 内容は明確で理由もありますが、文法（時制や三人称単数のs）と冗長な繰り返しを直してください。また、接続詞で理由を滑らかに繋げ、購入の具体例（サイトやタイプ）を加えるとより説得力が増します。

例: Yes, I have. Buying shoes online saves me time, because I often work until midnight and can't visit stores. For example, I usually order trainers from a reliable online retailer and check customer reviews before I buy.

提案: 考えは示せていますが、語彙や文法の誤り（冠詞、比較表現、金額の表現）と曖昧さが目立ちます。具体的な金額の言い方を統一し、状況ごとに分けて簡潔に述べてください。また“cheapest 1”の表現は不自然なので修正を。

例: It depends. For special occasions I might spend over CN¥1,000 on a pair, but for everyday use I usually buy inexpensive shoes that cost around CN¥100–300.

提案: 意見は明確ですが表現がぎこちなく、繰り返しや曖昧な語（"because of age"）があるため自然ではありません。年齢や仕事との関連を具体的に述べ、接続詞で理由をはっきり示してください。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes. As I've gotten older and spend long hours on my feet at work, comfort is more important to me than following trends.

× No I don't because it's a bit hassle for me to buy shoes so I usually buy it. About every one year.

✓ No, I don't because it's a bit of a hassle for me to buy shoes, so I usually buy them about once a year.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; use 'them' for plural objects. 'A bit hassle' needs the article 'a' and the noun phrase should be 'a bit of a hassle'. 'About every one year' is unnatural; use 'about once a year'. Also add commas for clarity.

× Yes I have bought shoes online because it save me time.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online because it saves me time.

The verb 'save' must agree with the singular subject 'it' in the present simple after 'because'; add the third person singular -s: 'saves'.

× I usually work until midnight so I I find it difficult to go to the shops.

✓ I usually work until midnight, so I find it difficult to go to the shops.

There is a duplicated pronoun 'I I' which should be a single 'I'. Add a comma before 'so' to join two clauses. No other pronoun changes are needed.

× It depends on situations when I have to buy shoes for celebration, I choose high-priced shoes which cost about more than CN¥1000.

✓ It depends on the situation; when I have to buy shoes for a celebration, I choose high-priced shoes that cost more than CN¥1000.

Use 'the situation' or 'the situation' singular rather than 'situations' with 'depends on'. 'For celebration' needs an article: 'for a celebration'. 'Which' is better as 'that' for restrictive clauses; 'about more than' is redundant — use just 'more than'. Also split into two clauses with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× But usually I choose cheapest 1.

✓ But usually I choose the cheapest ones.

'Cheapest' needs the definite article 'the' when forming a superlative. '1' is incorrect; use 'ones' to refer to shoes (plural). Alternatively say 'but usually I choose cheaper ones' if comparing.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because of age.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because of my age.

Use the possessive 'my' with 'age' to indicate why; 'because of age' is incomplete. 'Because of my age' correctly links preference to the speaker's age.

× Uh, when I become mature, I I think it is important for me to continue to work comfortably.

✓ Uh, as I become older, I think it is important for me to continue to work comfortably.

Remove duplicated 'I I'. 'When I become mature' is unnatural in English; use 'as I become older' or 'when I get older'. This better expresses aging over time. The rest of the sentence is fine.