Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use correct verb forms and articles, and keep answer concise with a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. For example, say when you buy shoes and what kind you prefer. Avoid redundancy.

例: I usually buy shoes only when I need them. I prefer comfortable, sporty shoes because they are practical for daily activities and provide good support for walking.

提案: Correct tense and pronoun use, and make the reason specific: use present perfect or present simple for habits, and explain briefly why online shopping is better (selection, price, convenience). Use linking words like because or so.

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there is a wider selection and the prices are more competitive. For example, I can compare styles and read reviews before I decide.

提案: Fix grammar and be specific about amounts or ranges. Start with a clear topic sentence stating a typical spend, then give a reason and an example. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas.

例: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes, around $50–$100, because I prefer good quality shoes that last longer. For example, I recently paid $80 for running shoes that have lasted over a year.

提案: Avoid repetition and correct articles/plurals. Give a succinct preference statement then one specific reason or example. Use linking words such as because or so to add clarity.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because they protect my feet and make walking or running easier. For instance, I choose cushioned trainers for daily use even if they are not very trendy.

× Well, I often buying shoes when I need them and I mostly prefer to comfortable sporty shoes.

✓ Well, I often buy shoes when I need them and I mostly prefer comfortable sporty shoes.

The phrase 'often buying' incorrectly uses the -ing form; after 'often' use the base verb 'buy' for simple present habit. Also 'prefer to comfortable sporty shoes' mixes structures: use 'prefer' + adjective + noun (no 'to') or 'prefer to' + verb. Remove 'to' and place adjectives before noun: 'prefer comfortable sporty shoes'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct adjective order.

× Yes, I usually bought shoes from online platforms as it offers us several types of designs of shoes and also give better accessible price.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes from online platforms because they offer many different designs and better, more affordable prices.

The student used 'bought' (past) but 'usually' indicates a habitual present action; use simple present 'buy'. 'From online' should be 'from online platforms' is okay but better without 'from' or with 'on'. 'It offers us' is wrong because 'platforms' is plural, so use 'they offer' (subject-verb agreement). 'Give' should be 'offer' or 'provide' matching plural subject. 'Accessible price' is unnatural; use 'affordable prices'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits, match plural subject with plural verb, and choose natural collocations (affordable prices, different designs).

× Well I'm not spend a hefty amount on shoes, I spend a like medium amount on shoes because I prefer more of quality shoes that have a live longer quality.

✓ Well, I don't spend a hefty amount on shoes; I spend a medium amount because I prefer higher-quality shoes that last longer.

'I'm not spend' incorrectly mixes present continuous and base verb; use simple present negative 'I don't spend'. 'I spend a like medium amount' is ungrammatical; use 'I spend a medium amount' or 'I spend a moderate amount'. 'Prefer more of quality shoes' is wrong word order and choice; use 'prefer higher-quality shoes'. 'Have a live longer quality' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'that last longer' to express durability. Suggestion: use correct negative simple present, choose appropriate quantifiers, and use concise adjective-noun forms like 'higher-quality' and verb 'last' for durability.

× Well I mentioned before that I most prefer a comfortable shoes as it also comfortable for my feet and also comfortable for walking and running.

✓ Well, I mentioned before that I mostly prefer comfortable shoes as they are comfortable for my feet and for walking and running.

'A comfortable shoes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'shoes'; remove 'a' and use plural 'comfortable shoes'. 'I most prefer' is unnatural; use 'I mostly prefer'. 'It also comfortable' uses singular 'it' for plural 'shoes' and omits the verb 'is'; use 'they are comfortable'. Repeat 'comfortable' unnecessarily; keep concise: 'comfortable for my feet and for walking and running.' Suggestion: ensure number agreement between article/pronoun and noun, include the verb 'to be' in descriptions, and avoid repetitive adjectives.