Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear with a topic sentence, use correct grammar, avoid redundancy, and give one or two specific supporting details. Mention frequency (how often) and types of shoes with linking words.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy shoes two or three times a year, depending on the season. For example, I buy sneakers for everyday wear and sandals for summer because they are comfortable and suitable for hot weather.

提案: Start with a clear yes/no and give a concise reason using correct vocabulary and linking words. Explain when or why you shop online and one specific benefit or drawback.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. I prefer shopping online because there is a wide selection and I can easily compare prices, although sometimes the fit is uncertain so I check return policies before buying.

提案: Give a clear amount and explain why with specific reasons. Use correct currency phrasing and avoid vague statements. Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

例: I usually spend about $30 to $50 on a pair of shoes because I prefer good quality that lasts longer, but I avoid very expensive brands unless I need dress shoes for a special occasion.

提案: Give a direct preference sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct grammar and natural phrasing will improve clarity.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I often exercise outdoors. For instance, I wear cushioned running shoes that keep my feet supported and allow me to be more active without pain.

× Yes, I like buying shoes because the shoe has a kind of the function.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because shoes have a certain function.

The student used 'the shoe' and 'the function' incorrectly. Use the plural 'shoes' when speaking generally, and 'a certain function' is the correct indefinite phrase. Also change 'has' to 'have' to match the plural subject.

× So it depends on situation.

✓ So it depends on the situation.

The sentence misses the definite article 'the' before 'situation' when referring to a specific context. Add 'the' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct.

× I I choose the shoes most sneakers or sand.

✓ I usually choose sneakers or sandals most of the time.

This sentence has word order and vocabulary errors. 'I I' is a repetition; 'the shoes most' is incorrect order; 'sand' should be 'sandals'. Rephrase for clarity and correct collocation: 'choose X most of the time.'

× Yes, I have a above shoes online because these days the online shop is developed well and it makes me confident and it's really seeking the various issues.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online because online shopping has developed a lot these days, which makes me confident, although there are some different issues.

The student used 'have a above shoes' incorrectly instead of a present perfect 'have bought'. 'Online shop is developed well' is awkward; use 'online shopping has developed a lot'. 'It's really seeking the various issues' is unclear; suggest 'there are some different issues' to convey problems. Use correct tense and clearer phrasing.

× Usually I spend the $10 in the shoes because I'm not prepared The expensive shoe it is the.

✓ Usually I spend about $10 on shoes because I'm not prepared to buy expensive ones.

Use 'about $10' and preposition 'on' for spending. 'The expensive shoe it is the.' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I'm not prepared to buy expensive ones.' Also use plural 'ones' to refer generally to expensive shoes.

× It is not important for the price.

✓ The price is not important to me.

Use natural word order and preposition: 'important to me' rather than 'important for the price'. Also 'the price is not important' is clearer.

× I prefer comfort type of shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable types of shoes.

Use the adjective 'comfortable' instead of noun 'comfort' to modify 'shoes'. 'Type of' should be plural 'types of' or simply 'comfortable shoes.'

× I usually go to exercise in outdoors so the comfortable shoes me more active and comfortable my feet.

✓ I usually exercise outdoors, so comfortable shoes make me more active and keep my feet comfortable.

Use 'exercise outdoors' (no 'to'). 'Make me more active' is correct structure; 'comfortable my feet' is incorrect — use 'keep my feet comfortable.' Adjust word order and verbs for clarity.

× So that's the reason why I prefer that.

✓ So that's why I prefer them.

Use 'why' without 'the reason' redundancy: either 'That's the reason I prefer them' or 'That's why I prefer them.' Use 'them' to refer back to 'comfortable shoes.'