Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like "uh", correct phrasing ("once a year"), and add a brief reason or example to enrich the response. Keep answers under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes — usually once a year. I prefer genuine leather because it lasts longer and feels more comfortable, especially in hot weather.

提案: Improve grammar and phrasing: say "bought shoes online" and avoid awkward phrases like "virtual places." Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") and give a specific brief example with correct verb forms and numbers. Avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because online stores offer a wider selection. For example, I recently bought a pair of leather shoes online for about 5,000 rupees.

提案: Correct number expression and remove repetition: say "six to eight thousand" and avoid repeating words ("shoe shoes"). Start with a clear topic sentence and add a brief reason using a linking word such as "because." Be specific about currency if helpful.

例: I usually spend six to eight thousand rupees on a pair of shoes because I believe good quality lasts longer and is more comfortable.

提案: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a direct statement, then add one clear reason using a linking word like "because." Avoid wordy phrases such as "a lot of time" and "for a longer duration of time."

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods and need to move easily without pain.

× I purchase shoes every one year and uh, when I do so, I purchase shoes which are of pure leather.

✓ I buy shoes every year, and when I do, I buy shoes made of genuine leather.

Use simple present 'buy' for habitual actions instead of 'purchase' which is formal; 'every one year' is incorrect — correct is 'every year'; 'when I do so' is wordy, 'when I do' is natural; use 'made of genuine leather' or 'pure leather' corrected to 'genuine leather' for natural collocation.

× Yes, I have bought shoes from online platforms multiple times as we can explore variety when buying from virtual places.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes on online platforms multiple times because we can explore a variety of options when buying from virtual stores.

Use preposition 'on' with 'online platforms' not 'from online platforms' in this context; add 'a' before 'variety' and specify 'variety of options'; 'because' is clearer than 'as' here; 'virtual places' is unnatural — use 'virtual stores' or 'online stores'.

× Recently I purchased a leather shoes which costed me around 5K from online.

✓ Recently I purchased a pair of leather shoes online that cost me around 5K.

'a leather shoes' is incorrect: use 'a pair of leather shoes' or 'leather shoes' without 'a'; 'costed' is wrong — the past tense/past participle of 'cost' is 'cost'; place 'online' appropriately; use a relative clause 'that cost me' not 'which costed me'.

× I usually spend 6 to 8 thousands when I buy shoes as I believe quality is essential in terms of shoe shoes.

✓ I usually spend six to eight thousand when I buy shoes because I believe quality is essential when it comes to shoes.

Use 'six to eight thousand' (no plural 'thousands' when specifying an amount); 'as' can be replaced by 'because' for clarity; phrase 'in terms of shoe shoes' is incorrect and redundant — use 'when it comes to shoes' or simply 'for shoes'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes as they are something that we wear a lot of time and for a longer duration of time and it is really essential for them to be comfortable to move in.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because we wear them a lot and for long periods, so it is essential that they are comfortable to move in.

Avoid 'a lot of time' and 'for a longer duration of time' repetition — use 'a lot' and 'for long periods'; replace 'they are something that we wear' with 'we wear them' and ensure pronoun agreement; 'it is really essential for them to be comfortable to move in' is wordy — use 'it is essential that they are comfortable to move in'.