Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and remove hesitation words (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct article and plural forms (a pair of shoes / shoes).

例: Yes. I enjoy buying shoes because I prefer pairs that are both comfortable and a little stylish. For example, I usually look for cushioned soles and simple designs that match current trends.

提案: Use correct tense and agreement, and avoid repeating the same idea. Start with a direct answer, then briefly describe what happened using linking words (e.g., however, so) and specific details (size issue, refund).

例: Yes. Last year I bought a pair from Flipkart, but they were the wrong size. So I returned them and the company refunded my money under their return policy.

提案: Give a clear numeric answer and explain reasons concisely. Avoid filler words and use correct word choices (expensive, a pair of shoes). Provide one supporting reason with a linking word.

例: I usually spend around 2000 to 3000 rupees per pair. I choose this range because I want shoes that are both comfortable and stylish without being overly expensive.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Use natural phrasing (both comfortable and fashionable) and avoid awkward structures. Give one brief reason with a linking word and one simple example if possible.

例: I prefer shoes that are both comfortable and fashionable because they help me feel good and look presentable. For example, I choose sneakers with good support that also have a clean, modern design.

× Yes, I do like to buy uh shoes because, uh, I think I often prefer to have a shoes which are comfortable and little bit stylish according to a special uh fashion trend.

✓ Yes, I like to buy shoes because I often prefer to have shoes that are comfortable and a little bit stylish according to a particular fashion trend.

The student misused articles 'a' before the plural noun 'shoes' and used awkward phrases. Use no article with the plural noun 'shoes'. Change 'which' to 'that' for restrictive clause and add 'a' before 'little' in 'a little bit'. Replace 'special uh' with 'particular' for clarity.

× So these kind of the shoes that I really like.

✓ So these kinds of shoes are the ones I really like.

'These kind' is singular/plural confusion. Use 'these kinds of shoes' (plural) and include a verb 'are'. Also 'the ones' is more natural than just 'the'. This fixes subject-verb agreement and completes the sentence structure.

× Yes, I remember that last year I have bought uh shoes from uh, Flipkart, but unfortunately it were not of my same size as I often wear my same size of shoes.

✓ Yes, I remember that last year I bought shoes from Flipkart, but unfortunately they were not my usual size.

When referring to a specific time in the past ('last year'), use simple past 'bought' rather than present perfect 'have bought'. Also 'it were' is incorrect—use plural 'they were' to agree with 'shoes'. Simplify 'not of my same size as I often wear my same size of shoes' to 'not my usual size' for clarity and correctness.

× Then I returned these shoes and they gave uh return policy to me and they refund all the money.

✓ Then I returned the shoes and they honored the return policy and refunded all the money.

Maintain past tense consistency: 'returned' (past) should be followed by 'refunded' (past), not 'refund'. 'Gave return policy to me' is unnatural; use 'honored the return policy' or 'accepted the return'. This corrects verb tense and improves phrasing.

× Well, I often spend around 2000 to 3000 per pair because I think, umm, I often prefer to wear a comfortable and stylish shoes rather than to purchase expenses shoes.

✓ Well, I often spend around 2000 to 3000 per pair because I prefer to wear comfortable and stylish shoes rather than purchase expensive ones.

Remove the article 'a' before plural 'shoes'. Use 'expensive' instead of 'expenses'. Omit the second 'to' before 'purchase' and use 'ones' to avoid repetition. This fixes preposition/article misuse and wrong adjective form.

× Well, I prefer to have a both kind of the shoes, which can be a comfortable as well as fashionable, because I think uh shoes are the one of the thing which gives uh enhanced maintain the looks also, and it also gives the elegant look to the person.

✓ Well, I prefer to have both kinds of shoes that can be comfortable as well as fashionable, because I think shoes are one of the things that enhance and maintain appearance, and they also give a person an elegant look.

Errors include 'a both kind' (redundant article), 'the shoes' unnecessary, and incorrect relative clauses. Use 'both kinds of shoes' (plural). 'Which can be a comfortable' should be 'that can be comfortable'. Replace 'are the one of the thing which gives uh enhanced maintain the looks also' with 'are one of the things that enhance and maintain appearance' for grammatical verb usage and clarity. Use plural pronoun 'they' to agree with 'shoes' and 'a person' for natural phrasing.