Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I like buying shoes), then give a clear frequency and a short reason. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. For example, say how often using a natural phrase (e.g. once every few months) and give one reason with a linking word.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes once every three to six months because I wear sneakers a lot and they get worn out quickly.

提案: Give a clear yes/no answer, then provide a brief specific example of when or why you bought shoes online. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid repeated phrases. Mention a detail like a website, the convenience, or a specific purchase.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. For example, I bought a pair of running shoes from an online store last year because it was more convenient and offered a wider selection than local shops.

提案: Give a clear, realistic amount and explain briefly how you decide your budget. Use consistent currency and numbers, and one or two supporting details. If you mean per pair or per year, state that so your answer is specific.

例: I usually spend around ¥10,000 per pair of good-quality shoes because I prefer durable materials, and I try to avoid buying cheaper shoes that wear out quickly.

提案: Start with a direct preference (I prefer comfortable shoes), then give a clear reason and one example. Use linking words (because, so) and correct vocabulary (sneakers, casual). Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I dress casually most days. For example, I often wear sneakers since they are practical for walking and match my casual outfits.

× Yes, I prefer buying shoes because I like sneakers because I. It's I worry it once or six months.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes, especially sneakers. I usually buy them every one to six months.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('because I.' and 'It's I worry it') causing sentence structure errors (ID 26). Combine ideas into complete sentences, remove redundant words, and use a clear time expression: 'every one to six months' or 'once every one to six months'. Keep verb forms consistent and logical.

× Yes, I have I have ever bought shoes online because I as far as I mentioned as as far as I mentioned, I like buying shoes and I have I had. Tell me.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online. As I mentioned, I like buying shoes.

The original contains repeated and incorrect verb forms ('I have I have ever bought', 'I have I had') and redundant phrases. Use present perfect 'I have bought' to indicate past experience with relevance to the present. Remove 'ever' when 'have' is already used in this short answer, and simplify to a clear statement. This addresses sentence structure errors (ID 26) and past tense misuse (ID 5).

× I usually spend money on shoes about ¥110,000 because I decide to spend ¥10,000 minimum.

✓ I usually spend about ¥10,000 on shoes, and my minimum is ¥10,000.

The original gives inconsistent numbers (¥110,000 vs ¥10,000) and incorrect word order ('spend money on shoes about ¥110,000'). This is an incorrect use of quantifiers and number expression (ID 14). Ensure the intended amount is clear and place the amount directly after 'spend' or after 'about'. If you meant ¥10,000, state it consistently.

× I like controller shoes because my outfit is casual style. So tornado shoes would sneakers are suitable my style.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because my style is casual, so sneakers suit me best.

The original uses incorrect words ('controller', 'tornado shoes') and awkward structure. This is incorrect adjective/word choice and sentence structure error (IDs 13 and 26). Use 'comfortable' not 'controller', and 'sneakers suit me' rather than 'would sneakers are suitable my style'. Keep subject-verb order correct and use 'prefer' or 'I like' plus reason.