Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tự nhiên, rõ ràng và phù hợp với câu hỏi. Tuy nhiên cần tránh câu ngắn kết thúc đột ngột như "That's it." và nên thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn (ví dụ: loại giày thường mua, thương hiệu hoặc lý do cụ thể chọn chất liệu). Ngoài ra hãy dùng từ nối để liên kết ý tốt hơn.

例: I don't buy shoes very often — usually only about once a year. I tend to prioritise quality and comfort, so I often choose leather or well-padded sneakers that last longer. For example, I prefer neutral colours that match most outfits, which makes them more versatile.

提案: Câu trả lời rõ ràng, có cấu trúc tốt và giải thích lý do hợp lý. Cần sửa lỗi nhỏ về từ vựng ("over quality" -> "overall quality") và tránh bắt đầu bằng câu phủ định quá ngắn; bạn có thể mở rộng bằng một ví dụ cụ thể về lần thử giày gần nhất để tăng tính thuyết phục.

例: I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on in stores to ensure a good fit. For example, when I tried a pair of running shoes last month, I discovered they were too narrow despite the right length, so buying in person saved me a lot of trouble. I also check the materials and overall quality before I decide.

提案: Nội dung trả lời đầy đủ nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ ("I'm still financially rely" -> "I still rely financially" hoặc "I'm still financially dependent"). Bạn nên thêm liên kết giữa các câu và một ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: thương hiệu hoặc loại giày trong tầm giá đó) để làm rõ hơn.

例: I usually spend less than 1,000,000 VND on a pair of shoes because I still rely financially on my parents. For instance, I often buy basic sneakers from local brands that cost around 800,000 VND, which are comfortable and affordable. I don't believe in paying a lot just for fashion.

提案: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi chính tả/nhầm từ ("I wet them" có thể là "I wear them"). Cần sửa lỗi này vì làm giảm tính chuyên nghiệp. Ngoài ra nên dùng liên từ để nối lý do và đưa ví dụ cá nhân (ví dụ công việc hoặc hoạt động khiến phải đi lâu) để tăng độ cụ thể.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often wear them for long periods during the day. However, I also care about appearance, so ideally I choose stylish trainers that have good cushioning and a clean design. For example, I wear cushioned sneakers to campus that look smart enough for meetings and are comfortable for long walks.

× I'm not really into buying shoes, so I only purchase a new pair about once a year.

✓ I'm not really into buying shoes, so I only buy a new pair about once a year.

The verb 'purchase' is correct but slightly formal compared to the conversational context; changing to the simple present 'buy' keeps present habitual tense and natural style. Use simple present for regular habits: 'I only buy a new pair about once a year.'

× Since I don't shop for shoes very often, I usually prioritise quality and comfort over style.

✓ Since I don't shop for shoes very often, I usually prioritize quality and comfort over style.

This is primarily a spelling/register issue (British vs American). For consistency, choose one spelling. 'Prioritise' (British) or 'prioritize' (American) both grammatically correct. The sentence structure and grammar are otherwise correct.

× That's it.

✓ That's all.

'That's it' is acceptable colloquially, but 'That's all' is slightly more natural when finishing a response. Both are grammatically fine; change is stylistic to match polite exam tone.

× Since I wear a relatively large shoe size, it's important for me to check whether they fit properly.

✓ Since I wear a relatively large shoe size, it's important for me to check whether they fit me properly.

Pronoun reference: 'they' refers to shoes and is grammatically acceptable, but adding 'me' clarifies the object of 'fit'. This improves precision: 'fit me properly.'

× Besides that, I can inspect the materials and over quality more carefully in person.

✓ Besides that, I can inspect the materials and overall quality more carefully in person.

Typo: 'over quality' should be 'overall quality'. 'Overall' is the correct adjective to describe the general quality; this fixes the word choice error.

× At the moment I'm still financially rely on my parents, so I try to be mindful of my spending.

✓ At the moment I'm still financially reliant on my parents, so I try to be mindful of my spending.

Wrong word form: 'rely' is a verb, but the sentence needs an adjective describing the subject 'I'. Use 'reliant' (adjective) after the adverb 'financially': 'financially reliant on my parents.'

× Also, I don't think expensive shoes are necessary just to appear fashionable.

✓ Also, I don't think expensive shoes are necessary just to appear fashionable.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× I'd say I slightly prefer comfortable shoes because I wet them for long periods during the day.

✓ I'd say I slightly prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods during the day.

Typo: 'wet' should be 'wear'. 'Wear' is the correct verb for using clothing/shoes. 'Wet' is incorrect and changes the meaning.

× However, appearance is still important to me.

✓ However, appearance is still important to me.

Sentence is correct as written; no grammatical change required. Included to show no error.

× Ideally, I'd choose a pair that offers both comfort and an attractive design, since I don't think comfort alone is enough if I don't like the way the shoes look.

✓ Ideally, I'd choose a pair that offers both comfort and an attractive design, since I don't think comfort alone is enough if I don't like how the shoes look.

Stylistic simplification: replace 'the way the shoes look' with 'how the shoes look' for concision. Both are grammatically correct; this is a stylistic improvement to make the sentence more natural.