Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法と表現の自然さを向上させ、冗長さを避けること。特に「your seasons」は不自然なので「the seasons」に直すこと。トピック文を明確にし、理由や具体例をつなぐときに接続語（for example, in summer, in winter）を適切に使うと良い。全体を3文程度にまとめ、不要な語を削る練習をすること。

例: Yes, I do. I usually buy shoes about four times a year because I choose different styles for each season. For example, I buy sandals in summer and boots in winter.

提案: 理由を述べる際の文法と語順を改善すること。「online store」の前に冠詞を入れ、目的を表す表現（I prefer to）を使うと自然に聞こえる。また、Supporting detailとして試着の重要性を説明する際は接続詞で論理的に繋げると良い。

例: No, I haven't. I prefer shopping in physical stores because it's hard to find the right fit online, and I like to try shoes on before buying them.

提案: 情報は具体的で良いですが、語彙と結びつけ方を改善すると更に良くなる。'for my shoes'より'do spend on shoes'や'spend about ¥10,000 on a pair'など自然な前置詞を使うこと。理由を述べる際にmore natural collocations（high-quality, durable）にハイフンを使って明確にすること。

例: I usually spend about ¥10,000 on a pair of shoes because I prefer high-quality, durable footwear. For example, I paid ¥15,000 for a pair of running shoes last month.

提案: 接続詞の重複（since because）は避け、理由を簡潔に述べること。'easy to walk and look'は不自然なので'relatively easy to walk in and more practical'など具体的な表現に直す。文は3文以内に収め、Supporting detailで一つの明確な具体例を示すと良い。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are easier to walk in and more practical for daily use. For example, I usually wear sports shoes when I walk a lot, and they keep me comfortable and relaxed all day.

× I like buying shoes and I buy them four times in a year.

✓ I like buying shoes and I buy them four times a year.

'In a year' is not idiomatic here; the correct phrase is 'a year' or 'per year'. Use 'four times a year' for frequency expressions. Also ensure simple present for habitual action is correct.

× I want to enjoy my fashions according to your seasons.

✓ I want to enjoy fashion according to the seasons.

'According to your seasons' is odd and uses incorrect pronoun and article. Use 'fashion' (uncountable) and 'the seasons' to refer generally to seasonal styles. 'According to' is fine but needs a natural object.

× For example, in summer I buy sandals, in winter I like boots.

✓ For example, in summer I buy sandals; in winter I like boots.

This sentence mainly needs a punctuation fix for clarity; the verbs 'buy' and 'like' in simple present correctly describe habitual actions across seasons.

× No I haven't.

✓ No, I haven't.

Add a comma after 'No' for natural spoken punctuation. Grammatically 'I haven't' (short for 'I haven't') is incomplete—full form should be 'No, I haven't' understood as 'No, I haven't ever' or 'No, I haven't bought shoes online.' Clarify by completing the sentence if needed.

× This is because it's difficult to find suitable shoes online store.

✓ This is because it's difficult to find suitable shoes in online stores.

Missing preposition 'in' and pluralization of 'store' needed. The phrase should be 'in online stores' or 'on online stores/websites'. Sentence structure requires a prepositional phrase to indicate location.

× So I want to choose my shoes in their stores and try before buying.

✓ So I want to choose my shoes in the stores and try them on before buying.

Add object 'them' and particle 'on' after 'try' to form the phrasal verb 'try on'. 'Their stores' is unclear; 'the stores' is natural. Preposition and object are required.

× I often spend about ¥10,000 for my shoes.

✓ I often spend about ¥10,000 on my shoes.

Use 'spend ... on' not 'spend ... for'. The simple present 'often spend' correctly describes habitual action.

× This is because I want to wear high quality and durable shoes.

✓ This is because I want to wear high-quality, durable shoes.

Compound adjective 'high-quality' needs a hyphen. Use a comma between coordinate adjectives 'high-quality' and 'durable'. This is a punctuation/word-formation issue.

× For example, last month I bought ¥15,000 for my running shoes.

✓ For example, last month I spent ¥15,000 on my running shoes.

Use 'spent ... on' rather than 'bought ... for' when indicating money paid. 'Bought ¥15,000 for my running shoes' is awkward; the correct verb is 'spent' or 'paid' with preposition 'on'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes since because it's easy to walk and look.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they make it easy to walk and move.

'Since because' is redundant; choose one conjunction, typically 'because'. 'It's easy to walk and look' is unnatural—use 'they make it easy to walk and move' or 'they are easy to walk in'. Replace vague 'look' with appropriate verb or phrase.

× For example, in my daily life I walk a lot with sports shoes.

✓ For example, in my daily life I walk a lot in sports shoes.

Use 'in' rather than 'with' to describe what you wear while walking: 'walk in sports shoes'. The present simple 'walk' is correct for habitual action.

× I always feel comfortable and relaxed.

✓ I always feel comfortable and relaxed.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple for habitual/current state; no change needed.

× I love them.

✓ I love them.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'them' correctly refers to 'sports shoes'. No change needed.