Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and provide specific reasons using linking words. For example, explain your feelings about buying shoes and how often you do it, with clear reasons.

例: I don't particularly enjoy buying shoes, but I usually purchase new ones about twice a month because my old shoes wear out quickly.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Use a clear topic sentence and linking words to explain your experience. Avoid filler words and provide specific details about when and why you bought shoes online.

例: Yes, I bought shoes online last year because it was my mother's birthday, and I wanted to surprise her with a gift.

提案: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Provide a direct response with specific details and use linking words to explain your reasons. Also, clarify the currency and amount you spend.

例: I usually spend around 400 dollars on shoes because I believe comfort is the most important factor when choosing footwear.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently, use linking words, and provide clear reasons with specific details.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me feel relaxed, especially since my job requires me to stand all day.

× I didn't.

✓ I don't.

The student is responding to a present tense question about liking to buy shoes. Using 'didn't' (past tense) is incorrect here; the present tense 'don't' should be used to match the question's tense.

× I don't like buy shoes.

✓ I don't like buying shoes.

After 'like', the verb should be in the '-ing' form. 'Like buy' is incorrect; it should be 'like buying' to be grammatically correct.

× And because it is not use, not not because.

✓ And because they are not used, not because anything else.

The phrase 'it is not use' is incorrect; 'use' should be the past participle 'used' and refer to plural 'they' (shoes). The sentence is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× I have the urban trains online.

✓ I have bought shoes online.

'The urban trains' is incorrect and unrelated. The student likely meant 'bought shoes online'. The pronoun and noun usage is incorrect here.

× last year's I bought, I bought a shoes online

✓ Last year, I bought shoes online.

'Last year's' is incorrect; it should be 'Last year'. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'.

× my mother, uh, birthday coming

✓ my mother's birthday was coming

Possessive form 'mother's' is needed to indicate the birthday belongs to the mother. Also, 'was coming' fits better for past context.

× I was coming, I, I brought.

✓ I was coming, so I bought it.

The phrase is unclear and incomplete. 'I brought' is incorrect; the past tense of 'buy' is 'bought'. The sentence needs to be completed for clarity.

× I often spend 400 on my shoes

✓ I often spend 400 on shoes

'My shoes' is less natural here; 'shoes' is better. Also, specifying currency would improve clarity, but not required here.

× because I think shoes is comfortable

✓ because I think shoes are comfortable

'Shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'.

× if the shoes isn't comfortable.

✓ if the shoes aren't comfortable.

'Shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'aren't' instead of 'isn't'.