Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'a pair of shoes' and 'shoes' multiple times. Also, correct the word 'shopolic' to 'shopaholic'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love buying shoes and consider myself a bit of a shopaholic. I usually buy shoes once or twice a week because I prefer them over other items.

提案: Make your answer clearer and grammatically correct. Use singular/plural forms properly and add linking words for coherence. For example, mention when you bought the shoes and why you liked them.

例: Yes, I bought a pair of Adidas shoes online from Amazon last week. They were very comfortable and fashionable, which I really liked.

提案: Be more specific about the amount or range you spend. Avoid vague phrases like 'a lot of money' and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words to explain why you spend that amount.

例: Honestly, I spend quite a bit on sneakers because I really love shoes. Usually, I spend around 3000 to 5000 rupees on a good pair.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas. Avoid repetition and make sentences concise.

例: It depends on the occasion. For parties or special events, I prefer wearing fashionable and expensive shoes that suit my personality. However, when I hang out with friends, I choose comfortable shoes.

× Well, I am a person who loves a pair of shoes a lot as I am a shopolic person and mostly I prefer shoes rather than other items and I buy shoes once or twice in a week.

✓ Well, I am a person who loves pairs of shoes a lot as I am a shopaholic person and mostly I prefer shoes rather than other items and I buy shoes once or twice a week.

The phrase 'a pair of shoes' is singular, but the context implies a general love for shoes in plural form, so 'pairs of shoes' is more appropriate. Also, 'shopolic' is a spelling error; the correct word is 'shopaholic'. Additionally, 'in a week' should be 'a week' without 'in'.

× Of course, I remembered last week I ordered Adidas stores from Amazon and I loved that shoes a lot.

✓ Of course, I remember last week I ordered Adidas shoes from Amazon and I loved those shoes a lot.

The verb 'remembered' is past tense but the context suggests present perfect or simple present to indicate a recent memory, so 'remember' is better. Also, 'Adidas stores' is incorrect; it should be 'Adidas shoes'. 'That shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; it should be 'those shoes'.

× That shoes were very comfortable and fashionable.

✓ Those shoes were very comfortable and fashionable.

The demonstrative pronoun 'that' is singular and does not agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. The correct plural form is 'those'.

× I buy shoes once or twice in a week.

✓ I buy shoes once or twice a week.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. The correct expression is 'once or twice a week'.

× Well, it D depends as whenever I have to go to parties or on special occasions at that time I wear expensive shoes according to my personality and on the other hand whenever I have to go for friends with friends at that time I use comfortable shoes.

✓ Well, it depends; whenever I have to go to parties or special occasions, I wear expensive shoes according to my personality, and on the other hand, whenever I go out with friends, I use comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'it D depends' contains a typo; it should be 'it depends'. The phrase 'go for friends with friends' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go out with friends'. Also, the sentence is long and needs proper punctuation for clarity.