Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达不自然，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，明确表达观点。

例: I don't like buying shoes very often nowadays because I already have several pairs I bought during high school when I was more interested in new shoes.

提案: 回答较为完整，但句子衔接稍显生硬。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并注意时态和细节准确性。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it's very convenient and offers a wider variety. For example, the last time I purchased trainers online was about three years ago.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，内容不完整。建议明确表达过去和现在的花费情况，并使用正确的语法。

例: In the past, I used to spend over CN¥500 on branded shoes, but nowadays I rarely buy new ones because my old shoes are still usable.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误（pray应为prefer），表达不够准确。建议注意词汇选择，句子结构更清晰。

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them all day for work and sports, so comfort is my top priority.

× Actually nowadays I don't like buying shoes because I have had some trainers I bought a few years ago because there was during high school when I was very into buying new shoes.

✓ Actually nowadays I don't like buying shoes because I have some trainers I bought a few years ago during high school when I was very into buying new shoes.

句中“there was during high school”结构不正确，且“some trainers I bought a few years ago because there was during high school”语序混乱。应去掉“there was”，并调整句子顺序，使表达更清晰。

× So nowadays I really buy it.

✓ So nowadays I rarely buy them.

“shoes”是复数，代词应使用“them”而非“it”，且根据上下文应表达“很少买”，故用“rarely”。

× Definitely, I bought shows online because it's very convenient and there are more types of shoes available online.

✓ Definitely, I bought shoes online because it's very convenient and there are more types of shoes available online.

“shows”拼写错误，应为“shoes”。

× And I still remember the last time I bought a new pair of trainers and I was about 3 years ago.

✓ And I still remember the last time I bought a new pair of trainers was about 3 years ago.

句中“and I was about 3 years ago”结构错误，应改为“was about 3 years ago”来正确表达时间状语。

× Actually, in the past I used to spend a large amount of money on shoes because I'm really into brands once, so I usually spend average over CN¥500 per shoes.

✓ Actually, in the past I used to spend a large amount of money on shoes because I was really into brands once, so I usually spent an average of over CN¥500 per pair of shoes.

“once”位置不当，应放在“was really into brands”中；“per shoes”应为“per pair of shoes”；“spend average”应为“spent an average”。

× Nowadays I really buy new shoes because my old one.

✓ Nowadays I rarely buy new shoes because of my old ones.

“my old one”应为复数“my old ones”指代鞋子；且缺少介词“because of”。

× I would definitely pray for the comfortable shoes because we tend to use the shoes for the whole day, use it to work, to do different kinds of sport.

✓ I would definitely prefer comfortable shoes because we tend to use the shoes for the whole day, use them to work, and to do different kinds of sports.

“pray for”用错，应为“prefer”；“use it”指代复数“shoes”应为“use them”；“sport”应为复数“sports”。

× So convenience is a top priority for me.

✓ So comfort is a top priority for me.

“convenience”是名词，句中应使用形容词“comfortable”或名词“comfort”来表达“舒适”而非“便利”。