Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clear and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually go shopping for them whenever I have free time. Generally, I prefer to buy sneakers and sandals.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and unclear words. Try to speak confidently and clearly. Also, explain your reasons with linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because the sizes often do not fit properly, and since there is no return policy, it makes online shopping risky.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has repetition. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

例: I usually do not have strict restrictions when buying shoes. If I like a pair and it fits well, I will buy it. However, I usually do not spend more than 4000 to 5000 rupees on a pair because I want to manage my budget wisely.

提案: Your answer has some unclear phrases and repetition. Try to use correct expressions and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to compare your ideas clearly.

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because, in the long run, they are more suitable for daily life. Although fashionable shoes may go out of style, comfortable shoes will always be in trend.

× Yes, I like buying shoes and I I go for go to shop them whenever I have time.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes and I go to shop for them whenever I have time.

The original sentence has repeated words ('I I') and incorrect verb phrase 'go for go to shop'. The correct structure is 'go to shop for them'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I generally I buy sneakers and sandals.

✓ I generally buy sneakers and sandals.

The sentence has an unnecessary repetition of 'I'. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence structure.

× No, I have not bought Asus online ever.

✓ No, I have not bought shoes online ever.

'Asus' is a brand name and likely a typo here. The correct pronoun is 'shoes' to match the context of the question about buying shoes online.

× the size does not, does not uh appropriately fit, and the no return policy makes it even harder to buy.

✓ the size does not appropriately fit, and the no-return policy makes it even harder to buy.

The phrase 'does not, does not uh appropriately fit' is redundant and awkward. Removing the repetition and adding a hyphen in 'no-return policy' improves clarity and correctness.

× Well, there is no restrictions for me for buying the shoes.

✓ Well, there are no restrictions for me when buying shoes.

'There is' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'restrictions'. Also, 'for buying the shoes' is better expressed as 'when buying shoes' for naturalness.

× If I love the shoes and it fits well, then I would buy it.

✓ If I love the shoes and they fit well, then I would buy them.

'Shoes' is plural, so pronouns referring to it should be plural ('they', 'them') and the verb should agree ('fit' instead of 'fits').

× However, I would not spend more than 4000 to ₹5000 on a particular shoes because.

✓ However, I would not spend more than ₹4000 to ₹5000 on a particular pair of shoes because.

'Shoes' is plural, so 'a particular shoes' is incorrect. It should be 'a particular pair of shoes'. Also, currency symbol placement is corrected.

× Definitely I will prefer comfortable shoes because in the long run the comfortable shoes is UMM goes well in day-to-day life.

✓ Definitely, I will prefer comfortable shoes because in the long run comfortable shoes go well in day-to-day life.

'Comfortable shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'go' instead of 'is' and 'goes'. Also, removing filler words and adding a comma improves clarity.

× The fashionable shoes may be may be dead in the trend but the comfortable shoes will always be in the train.

✓ Fashionable shoes may be out of trend, but comfortable shoes will always be in trend.

The phrase 'dead in the trend' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'out of trend'. Also, 'in the train' is a mishearing of 'in trend'. Removing repeated words improves clarity.