Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "occasionally easily" and improve sentence flow by using appropriate linking words. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and correct article usage, for example, "a calm atmosphere" instead of "calm atmosphere."

例: I only go to the library occasionally, mainly when I need a quiet place to focus on studying for exams. For example, during exam periods, I find that a calm atmosphere helps me concentrate better. However, I sometimes prefer studying at home or in a café because I enjoy a bit of background noise.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by correcting grammar (e.g., plural forms like "textbooks" and "assignments") and by using linking words more naturally. Also, try to avoid redundancy and make your sentences more concise and coherent.

例: In the library, I usually focus on my studies because it's a quiet place to concentrate. I spend time reading textbooks and completing assignments to meet my deadlines effectively.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. The phrase "but when I was a child instead" is confusing. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, and use correct tenses and linking words to improve coherence.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a child. Instead, I preferred spending time outdoors, playing with my friends in the playground and doing various activities. I found it more enjoyable to be active rather than sitting inside reading books.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Avoid repeating words like "tend to tend to" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide more specific reasons or examples.

例: I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because they generally prefer playing outdoor activities. They usually dislike sitting in one place for a long time to read.

× No, I only go to the library occasionally easily when I need a quiet place to focus on studying for exams.

✓ No, I only go to the library occasionally when I need a quiet place to focus on studying for exams.

The adverb 'easily' is misplaced and does not fit the context. It should be removed to improve sentence clarity and correctness.

× For instance, during exam periods I find calm atmosphere very helpful for concentration.

✓ For instance, during exam periods I find the calm atmosphere very helpful for concentration.

The noun 'atmosphere' is specific here, so it requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× In the library, I usually focus on my studies because it's a quiet place for me to concentrate and besides, I spend time reading textbook and completing assignment to meet my deadlines effectively.

✓ In the library, I usually focus on my studies because it's a quiet place for me to concentrate and besides, I spend time reading textbooks and completing assignments to meet my deadlines effectively.

The nouns 'textbook' and 'assignment' should be plural ('textbooks' and 'assignments') because the context implies multiple items.

× No, I didn't go to the library but when I was a child instead.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library when I was a child instead.

The conjunction 'but' is unnecessary and causes confusion. Removing it corrects the sentence structure.

× I think no, because generally kids tend to tend to like playing outdoors activity and they hate sitting in one fixed place to read some things for a long period.

✓ I think no, because generally kids tend to like playing outdoor activities and they hate sitting in one fixed place to read for a long period.

The phrase 'tend to tend to' is redundant and should be simplified to 'tend to'. Also, 'outdoors activity' should be 'outdoor activities' to be grammatically correct and plural to match the context.