Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and slightly unnatural. Try to avoid redundancy by combining ideas and using linking words to make your response more fluent and natural. Also, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and phrasing.

例: Yes, I often go to the library, especially when exams are approaching, because being around others who are studying motivates me to focus and study more effectively.

提案: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive. Try to use linking words and vary your vocabulary to make your response more engaging and natural. Also, avoid repeating the same phrases.

例: Usually, I study or read books in the library because it provides a quiet environment that helps me concentrate better than other places.

提案: Good answer with clear structure and details. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid listing actions without connection. Also, try to be more concise.

例: Actually, I didn't visit the library often as a child because I preferred hanging out with friends. However, after graduating from elementary school, I began going regularly to borrow books, read them, and write about my thoughts and feelings.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and fluent by using better linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid awkward phrasing like 'make them more intellectually and emotionally.'

例: Although I'm not Chinese, I believe many Chinese children frequently visit libraries nowadays because their parents encourage reading to help them develop intellectually and emotionally.

× I mean like people in the library studies and read books.

✓ I mean like people in the library study and read books.

The subject 'people' is plural, so the verb should be in the base form 'study' instead of 'studies'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to singular and plural forms.

× It makes me keep motivated so that helps me study more.

✓ It keeps me motivated so that helps me study more.

The phrase 'makes me keep motivated' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'keeps me motivated' where 'motivated' is an adjective describing the state. Using 'keep' here is unnecessary and incorrect.

× The library is the best place to concentrate on study or to read books.

✓ The library is the best place to concentrate on studying or to read books.

The verb 'concentrate' is followed by the preposition 'on' and then a gerund form. Therefore, 'study' should be changed to 'studying' to be grammatically correct.

× I think most of the Chinese children go to the library often these days because their parents encourage them to go to the library and read books to make them more intellectually and emotionally.

✓ I think most of the Chinese children go to the library often these days because their parents encourage them to go to the library and read books to make them more intellectual and emotional.

The words 'intellectually' and 'emotionally' are adverbs, but here adjectives 'intellectual' and 'emotional' are needed to describe 'them'. Using adverbs in this context is incorrect.