Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use clearer sentence structures and correct grammar, such as 'I used to go to the library during high school to do homework and research because we didn't have internet access at that time.'

例: I don't often go to the library now, but during high school, I used to visit it regularly to do homework and research since we didn't have internet access at home.

提案: Provide a clearer topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'search that book.' Instead, say 'I usually look for books that help with my homework, especially encyclopedias because they contain a lot of useful information.'

例: In the library, I usually look for books that help me with my homework. For example, I like using encyclopedias because they provide detailed information on many topics.

提案: Use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. For example, say 'I went to the library when I was a kid, especially in grade school. I often did homework with my classmates and researched animals because I was very interested in them.'

例: Yes, I went to the library often when I was a kid, especially during grade school. I usually did homework with my classmates and sometimes researched animals because I found them fascinating.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and provide a more structured answer. You can say, 'I am not sure because I didn't grow up around Chinese kids, but I think they often go to the library because I have seen it in Chinese reality shows.'

例: I don't know for sure since I didn't grow up with Chinese kids, but I believe they often visit libraries because I have seen this in Chinese reality shows.

× Nowadays no, but in the past during high school days I used to go to the library to do some homework and research because in the past we don't have access to computers that has Internet where where in you can easily search or search the web on what you were looking for.

✓ Nowadays no, but in the past during high school days I used to go to the library to do some homework and research because in the past we didn't have access to computers that had Internet where you can easily search the web for what you were looking for.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'don't have' and 'has' when referring to past situations. Since the speaker talks about the past, the verbs should be in the past tense: 'didn't have' and 'had'. Also, 'where where in you can' is redundant and incorrect; it should be simplified to 'where you can'. This correction aligns the verb tenses with the past context and improves clarity.

× I usually search for books that could help me about my homework and my favorite book would be Encyclopedia because you can search that book.

✓ I usually search for books that could help me with my homework and my favorite book would be the Encyclopedia because you can search in that book.

The phrase 'help me about my homework' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with'. Also, 'search that book' is awkward; it should be 'search in that book' to indicate looking inside the book. Adding 'the' before 'Encyclopedia' is necessary because it is a specific book title. These changes improve grammatical correctness and clarity.

× Yes, I go to the library when I was a kid, especially during grade school days.

✓ Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid, especially during grade school days.

The sentence mixes present tense 'go' with past time reference 'when I was a kid'. The verb should be in the past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. This correction ensures subject-verb tense agreement and temporal consistency.

× I usually do homework with my with my classmates and sometimes do some research about animals because it really picking my interest as a child.

✓ I usually did homework with my classmates and sometimes did some research about animals because it really piqued my interest as a child.

The sentence refers to past activities ('as a child') but uses present tense verbs 'do' and 'picking'. These should be in the past tense: 'did' and 'piqued'. Also, 'picking my interest' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'piqued my interest'. This correction aligns verb tenses with the past context and uses the correct idiomatic expression.

× Actually, I don't have any idea because growing up I am not surrounded by Chinese kids, but I think that they often go to the library because I've always watched reality shows from the Chinese community and.

✓ Actually, I don't have any idea because growing up I was not surrounded by Chinese kids, but I think that they often go to the library because I've always watched reality shows from the Chinese community.

The phrase 'growing up I am not surrounded' incorrectly uses present tense 'am' for a past situation. It should be 'was' to indicate past tense. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' which is incomplete; removing 'and' completes the sentence properly. These corrections improve tense consistency and sentence completeness.