Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences. For example, clarify your current situation and preference clearly.

例: I used to go to the library when I was a student because it was a quiet place to study. However, now that I have finished my studies and the library is far from my home, I prefer to do my research online at home.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct verb tenses and linking words to make it coherent. Also, avoid repetition and be more specific about your activities in the library.

例: I usually go to the library to study for exams because it offers a quiet and convenient environment. Nowadays, I also use it occasionally to conduct research and read academic books.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using smoother linking words and avoiding redundancy. Also, try to combine sentences for better flow.

例: No, I did not go to the library much as a child because there was no library near our home. Moreover, our parents encouraged us to focus mainly on school books rather than reading for pleasure.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, Chinese children often go to the library because both parents and schools highly encourage reading. They motivate students to explore various types of books, including science and literature, not only for enjoyment but also for self-development and academic success.

× I used to go to the library when I was a student, but now I already finished my study and because the library it's not close to me so I prefer to do my researches and at home online even though it's really quite place to stay.

✓ I used to go to the library when I was a student, but now I have already finished my studies and because the library is not close to me, I prefer to do my research at home online even though it's a really quiet place to stay.

The sentence contains a past tense issue with 'already finished' which should be present perfect 'have already finished' to indicate a completed action relevant to the present. Also, 'study' should be plural 'studies' as it refers to the entire course of education. 'Library it's not close' is incorrect; it should be 'library is not close' (subject-verb agreement). 'Researches' is incorrect as 'research' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. 'Quite place' should be 'quiet place' (spelling). The sentence also needs commas for clarity.

× I usually go to the library to study for exams and I spent a lot of time there because it's really quiet environment and convenient to study.

✓ I usually go to the library to study for exams and I spend a lot of time there because it's a really quiet environment and convenient to study.

The verb 'spent' is past tense, but the sentence is about habitual action, so present tense 'spend' is correct. Also, 'quiet environment' needs an article 'a' before it.

× But nowadays I use the library to conduct researches sometimes and to read academic books.

✓ But nowadays I sometimes use the library to conduct research and to read academic books.

The adverb 'sometimes' should be placed before the verb 'use' for correct adverb placement. 'Researches' is incorrect; 'research' is uncountable and should not be pluralized.

× No, I did not go to the library that much when I was a kid because there was no library close to our home and to be honest, our parents, they did not encourage us to read books that much.

✓ No, I did not go to the library that much when I was a kid because there was no library close to our home and, to be honest, our parents did not encourage us to read books that much.

The phrase 'our parents, they did not' is redundant; 'they' should be omitted. Commas are needed around 'to be honest' as it is a parenthetical phrase.

× Instead they encouraged us to just study school books.

✓ Instead, they encouraged us to just study school books.

A comma is needed after 'Instead' to separate the introductory word from the main clause.

× Yes, I believe Chinese children often go to the library. It is highly encouraged by both parents and school and they motivate the students to read different type of books, different different science and literature.

✓ Yes, I believe Chinese children often go to the library. It is highly encouraged by both parents and schools, and they motivate the students to read different types of books, including various science and literature books.

'School' should be plural 'schools' to match 'parents'. 'Different type of books' should be 'different types of books' to agree in number. The phrase 'different different science and literature' is repetitive and unclear; it should be 'various science and literature books' for clarity.

× And that's not only for enjoyment but for self development and academic purposes.

✓ And that's not only for enjoyment but also for self-development and academic purposes.

The correlative conjunction 'not only... but also' should be used together for correct sentence structure. 'Self development' should be hyphenated as 'self-development'.