Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it provides a quiet environment where I can concentrate. Moreover, reading books there helps me gain more knowledge and improve my skills.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details connected by linking words such as 'and' or 'because'.

例: In the library, I usually read books and take notes because it helps me understand the material better. This way, I can remember important information for my studies.

提案: Focus on correct grammar, especially past tense forms. Avoid unnecessary filler words and unclear phrases. Give a direct answer followed by a reason using linking words like 'because' or 'although'.

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because there were not many libraries near my home. Although I wanted to visit, the situation did not allow me to.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use correct plural forms and avoid vague phrases like 'you know'. Provide a clear reason with linking words.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because there are many libraries across China. Therefore, they have easy access to books and study materials.

× Yes, I often go to the library because I was going to the library I would getting more piece and also so it would be helping me a lot a lot.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because when I go to the library, I get more peace and it helps me a lot.

The phrase 'I would getting' is incorrect because 'would' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'piece' is a misspelling of 'peace'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct verb usage.

× By going into the library it gives me more knowledge by reading the books and all.

✓ Going to the library gives me more knowledge by reading books and so on.

The phrase 'By going into the library it gives me' is awkward. Using 'Going to the library gives me' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'the books and all' is informal; 'books and so on' is more appropriate.

× Well, I would usually do, uh, reading books and, and writing notes from the, uh, the books and some because, uh, while uh, going to the library, I would be getting more, uh, more knowledge and, and I would be, uh, be taking notes of that.

✓ Well, I usually read books and write notes from the books because when I go to the library, I get more knowledge and take notes.

The use of 'would usually do, uh, reading' is incorrect; 'usually read' is correct for habitual actions. Also, 'would be getting' and 'would be taking' are unnecessarily complex; simple present tense is better here.

× Uh, however, going to the library will be more.

✓ However, going to the library is more beneficial.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'is more beneficial' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× No, I didn't went to a library when I was killed and, uh, although I like to, uh, to go to, uh, the library at that time, but, uh, there was enough situations like, uh that, uh, that to, uh, that.

✓ No, I didn't go to a library when I was a kid, and although I liked to go to the library at that time, there were some situations that prevented me.

'Didn't went' is incorrect; after 'did', the base form 'go' should be used. 'Killed' is a wrong word; it should be 'kid'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× So I didn't went to library at that time.

✓ So I didn't go to the library at that time.

Again, 'didn't went' is incorrect; 'didn't go' is correct. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because there are so much library in China.

✓ Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because there are so many libraries in China.

'So much library' is incorrect because 'library' is countable; 'so many libraries' is correct for plural countable nouns.

× You know, that way either Chinese kids go to library very often.

✓ You know, in that way, Chinese kids go to the library very often.

The phrase 'that way either Chinese kids go to library' is awkward and unclear. Adding 'in' before 'that way' and 'the' before 'library' corrects the sentence structure and article usage.