Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "gave me" instead of "gives me" and "my own thing" which is vague. Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct tense. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library during my free time because it provides a quiet and comfortable environment where I can concentrate without distractions. Moreover, the library offers a wide range of useful resources that support my studies.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences and grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and incomplete thoughts.

例: Usually, I go to the library to study because I bring my laptop and study materials there. I find it a convenient place to focus, although I don't often read books there.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and unclear phrases like "I have promised you" and "I like to do all the things there." Try to be more concise and relevant. Also, avoid unnecessary fillers and provide specific details with linking words.

例: Yes, I started going to the library when I was about 7 or 8 years old. I enjoyed spending my weekends there reading books, although sometimes it was a bit cold inside.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks coherence. Avoid mixing locations without clear explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific reasons.

例: I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library, especially in Singapore. When I was in China, I rarely visited the library because it was too far and not very convenient for me.

× I like to go to the library as it gave me a comfortable and quiet area when I can focus on my own thing without distraction.

✓ I like to go to the library as it gives me a comfortable and quiet area where I can focus on my own things without distraction.

The sentence mixes past tense 'gave' with present tense context. Since the student is talking about a habitual action, present tense 'gives' is appropriate. Also, 'when I can focus' should be 'where I can focus' to correctly refer to the place. 'Thing' should be plural 'things' to indicate multiple activities or matters.

× I like to go to the library as it gave me a comfortable and quiet area when I can focus on my own thing without distraction.

✓ I like to go to the library as it gives me a comfortable and quiet area where I can focus on my own things without distraction.

The phrase 'my own thing' is better expressed as 'my own things' to indicate multiple personal matters or activities. Also, 'when' is incorrectly used; 'where' is the correct relative adverb to refer to a place.

× Do in the library let me have think.

✓ Let me think about what I do in the library.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The corrected sentence rearranges the words to form a proper request to think about the activities done in the library.

× I usually go to the libraries for studying as I always go there with my laptop and my study materials.

✓ I usually go to the library for studying as I always go there with my laptop and my study materials.

'Libraries' should be singular 'library' because the student refers to a specific place they usually visit. Using singular is more natural here.

× I don't prefer to read there as I think library is convenient and we and bring me a.

✓ I don't prefer to read there as I think the library is convenient and it provides me with what I need.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains pronoun errors. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'We and bring me a' is unclear; replacing with 'it provides me with what I need' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, this is of course, umm, when I was likely to be 7 or 8 years old.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was about 7 or 8 years old.

The phrase 'this is of course' is awkward and unnecessary. 'Likely to be' is incorrect here; 'about' is the correct word to indicate approximate age in past tense.

× Uh, I have promised you.

✓ Uh, I remember.

'I have promised you' is out of context and unclear. Possibly the student meant to say 'I remember' or 'I used to go'. The correction fits the context better.

× I like to go to the library during my leisure time, especially during weekends.

✓ I like to go to the library during my leisure time, especially on weekends.

The correct preposition for days and parts of days is 'on', so 'on weekends' is correct instead of 'during weekends'.

× but it's too cold as you know, library.

✓ but it's too cold, as you know, in the library.

The definite article 'the' is missing before 'library', and a preposition 'in' is needed to indicate location.

× Not really, I think. Not in Singapore, right? In China, I didn't go to the library during my later time and I'm not really confident or it's not convenient for me to go there as it's too far for me.

✓ Not really, I think. Not in Singapore, right? In China, I didn't go to the library in my later years and I'm not really confident or it's not convenient for me to go there as it's too far.

'During my later time' is incorrect; 'in my later years' is the correct phrase. Also, 'too far for me' is acceptable but 'too far' alone is sufficient. The sentence mixes past and present tenses correctly here.