Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子较长且有重复，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: Yes, I usually go to the library every weekend to read books about autonomous driving and microelectronics. Since I will study abroad in September, I need to prepare by learning as much as I can.

提案: 回答不够连贯，有语法错误和重复，表达不清晰。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，避免重复，并清楚表达主要内容。

例: In the library, I usually read books because there are strict rules about noise. Sometimes, I use my mobile phone to look up extra information, but mainly I focus on reading.

提案: 回答中时态混用且有重复，句子结构复杂且不够清晰。建议分句表达，注意时态一致，避免重复。

例: Yes, I went to the library almost every day after school when I was a child. My mom often took me there to get cartoon books because I loved them. Now, I prefer reading scientific books.

提案: 表达基本清晰，但用词和句式较简单，且“active trend”用词不当。建议使用更准确的词汇和丰富句式。

例: Actually, younger Chinese children rarely visit the library. They usually prefer watching TV or playing video games on their phones. I think this is an unfortunate trend because reading more books would greatly benefit their future.

× I would like to go to the library to read some books about the autonomous driving and amazing microelectronics

✓ I would like to go to the library to read some books about autonomous driving and amazing microelectronics

“the autonomous driving”中的“the”不适用于不可数名词“autonomous driving”，应去掉“the”。

× in every weekend I would like to go to the library

✓ every weekend I would like to go to the library

“in every weekend”应改为“every weekend”，因为“weekend”前不需要介词“in”。

× I would like to go to the library to read some books

✓ I like to go to the library to read some books

“would like to”表示愿望，通常用于请求或表达愿望，这里描述习惯用一般现在时“like to”更合适。

× The only thing I can do is reading books

✓ The only thing I can do is read books

“do is”后面应接动词原形，不能用动名词“reading”。

× in the library there are many rules about, uh, customers actions

✓ in the library there are many rules about customers' actions

“customers actions”应为所有格“customers' actions”，表示“顾客的行为”。

× whenever the core of my my core is reading books in

✓ my core is reading books

句子中“the core of my my core”重复且结构混乱，应简化为“my core”。

× my mom always take took me to the library to buy some cartoon books

✓ my mom always took me to the library to buy some cartoon books

“always”表示过去习惯，动词应使用过去时“took”，而非“take”。

× I was a big fan of it at that time

✓ I was a big fan of them at that time

“cartoon books”是复数，指代时应使用复数代词“them”，而非“it”。

× play video game on mobile phone

✓ play video games on mobile phone

“video game”应为复数“video games”，且“on mobile phone”前应加冠词“a”或“my”，如“on my mobile phone”。

× play video game on mobile phone

✓ play video games on my mobile phone

“video game”应为复数“video games”，且“mobile phone”前应加所有格“my”。