Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'libraries is'. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói rõ tần suất và mục đích đến thư viện.

例: Yes, I often go to the library, although not regularly. I usually visit it to study and improve my academic performance. Moreover, I sometimes meet my friends there to learn together.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và chú ý đến danh từ số nhiều và số ít (information không đếm được). Hãy dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về hoạt động của bạn trong thư viện.

例: In the library, I usually look for new information or lessons that I haven't learned in class. Since the library has a wide range of knowledge, it is essential for me to prepare for my studies.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'diary' thay vì 'library'. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: When I was young, the library was far from my home, so I rarely went there. However, now that I am older, I find it essential to visit the library to catch up on my lessons.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến số nhiều và số ít (libraries are, places are). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn.

例: In my opinion, Chinese kids often go to the library because they need to acquire knowledge. Both schools and libraries are good places for studying. Moreover, China offers excellent education opportunities.

× Also, libraries is a place for me to sum up with my friends to learn together.

✓ Also, libraries are a place for me to meet with my friends to learn together.

The subject 'libraries' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'sum up with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'meet with'.

× Library a place for me to find new informations or finding new lessons that which I haven't been taught in classes.

✓ The library is a place for me to find new information or new lessons that I haven't been taught in classes.

'Library' needs the definite article 'The' and the verb 'is' to form a complete sentence. 'Informations' is uncountable and should be 'information'. The phrase 'finding new lessons' should be parallel with 'to find new information', so 'finding' is changed to 'new lessons'. The phrase 'that which' is redundant; 'that' suffices.

× Also the knowledge is very wide in library so it's essential for me in the lessons.

✓ Also, the knowledge in the library is very broad, so it's essential for me in the lessons.

'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Very wide' is not a correct collocation for knowledge; 'very broad' or 'extensive' is appropriate.

× So when I was young, the library was so far from my home and I didn't have much as I didn't have many chance to come to the library.

✓ So when I was young, the library was far from my home and I didn't have many chances to come to the library.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'chance' is countable, so 'many chances' is correct. The phrase 'didn't have much as' is incorrect and omitted for clarity.

× But now when I am, when I grow up, it's essential for me to go to diary to cover my lessons.

✓ But now that I have grown up, it's essential for me to go to the library to cover my lessons.

The phrase 'when I am, when I grow up' is awkward; 'now that I have grown up' is correct. 'Diary' is incorrect; the intended word is 'library'.

× Schools and libraries is a good place for them to study.

✓ Schools and libraries are good places for them to study.

The compound subject 'Schools and libraries' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also, 'a good place' should be plural 'good places' to match the plural subject.

× Also, I think China is one of the best place where I have the best educations.

✓ Also, I think China is one of the best places where I have the best education.

'Place' should be plural 'places' because of 'one of the'. 'Educations' is uncountable and should be 'education'.