Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan agak bertele-tele. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih singkat dan jelas dengan kalimat utama yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan, kemudian tambahkan detail pendukung yang relevan dan terorganisir dengan baik.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading many kinds of books. When I was a student, I visited the library frequently, but now I go less often due to my busy schedule.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang lancar dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan mudah dipahami.

例: I usually work on my undergraduate thesis in the library. It has private rooms where I can concentrate, and there are plenty of books ranging from fiction to nonfiction that I enjoy reading.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Cobalah untuk menyusun kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan fokus pada poin utama dengan detail yang spesifik.

例: Yes, when I was in elementary school, I often went to the library because it had many books with pictures. I also practiced my English by reading English books there.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang fokus dan agak membingungkan. Cobalah untuk memberikan pendapat yang jelas dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan mudah dimengerti.

例: I am not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library, but from my experience, many Asian students, including my friends, like to visit the library to study.

× Well, I usually doing my script like undergraduate and also it has a a room like a private room where I can focus on my study.

✓ Well, I usually do my script like undergraduate and also it has a room like a private room where I can focus on my study.

The verb 'doing' is incorrectly used after 'usually'. After 'usually', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'do' is correct instead of 'doing'.

× So I really love to and there is a plenty of different books that I really love, like from fiction to nonfiction and.

✓ So I really love it and there are plenty of different books that I really love, like from fiction to nonfiction.

'There is a plenty of different books' is incorrect because 'books' is plural, so 'there are' should be used instead of 'there is'. Also, 'a plenty of' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'plenty of'.

× Well, when I was a kid, particularly when I was in elementary school, I usually go to the library because they have many different books that funds and a lot of like pictures in the books.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, particularly when I was in elementary school, I usually went to the library because they had many different books that were fun and a lot of pictures in the books.

The sentence refers to past habits, so the past tense 'went' should be used instead of 'go'. Also, 'have' should be 'had' to match the past tense. 'Funds' seems to be a typo or incorrect word; 'fun' fits better in context.

× And I can bring like the English practice, English practice my English also by reading English book.

✓ And I could practice my English also by reading English books.

The phrase 'bring like the English practice' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'practice my English'. Also, 'English book' should be plural 'English books' to match the context.

× I do not know that Chinese kids often go to the library because I am not Chinese and from my perspective, advocates often go to the library.

✓ I do not know if Chinese kids often go to the library because I am not Chinese and from my perspective, students often go to the library.

The word 'advocates' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'students'. Also, 'that' should be 'if' to introduce the indirect question.

× I think my friends likes to go to the library too but when I think about it, not all like.

✓ I think my friends like to go to the library too but when I think about it, not all of them do.

'Friends' is plural, so the verb should be 'like' not 'likes'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'of them do' completes the thought.