Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and repetitive. Try to avoid repeating similar ideas like 'broaden my knowledge' and 'enhance my skills' twice. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. For example, you can say "I often go to the library because I enjoy reading in a quiet environment. Additionally, I always borrow books to improve my knowledge and skills."

例: I often go to the library because I enjoy reading in a quiet and peaceful environment. Additionally, I always borrow books to improve my knowledge and skills.

提案: Your answer covers the main points but the sentence structure is a bit awkward and repetitive. Avoid repeating phrases like "enhance my skill set" and "broaden my knowledge" without variation. Also, the phrase "every time I did the last time" is unclear. Try to use linking words such as "and" or "also" to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually borrow books and use the library's computer to search for new titles. This helps me improve my skills and expand my knowledge.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "quiet and peaceful atmosphere" missing an article, and "every time I go there historically" which is unclear. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid unnecessary words. For example, "I enjoyed going to the library as a child because it was quiet and peaceful, allowing me to learn and gain knowledge."

例: I enjoyed going to the library as a child because it was quiet and peaceful, allowing me to learn and gain knowledge.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some redundancy and awkward phrasing, such as "also really love reading and also discovering more a variety of new books." Try to use linking words properly and avoid repeating "also" multiple times. For example, "Chinese kids often go to the library because they love reading and discovering a variety of new books, which helps them broaden their knowledge and improve their skills."

例: Chinese kids often go to the library because they love reading and discovering a variety of new books, which helps them broaden their knowledge and improve their skills.

× I would always borrow a book every time I visit the library so I can broaden my knowledge and also enhance my skills.

✓ I always borrow a book every time I visit the library so I can broaden my knowledge and also enhance my skills.

The use of 'would' here is incorrect because it implies a hypothetical or habitual action in the past, but the sentence refers to a present habitual action. Using 'always' without 'would' correctly expresses a habitual action in the present.

× I usually borrow books from the library and I would also use the computer at the library to search for some new books so I can enhance my skill set and also broaden my knowledge every time I did the last time.

✓ I usually borrow books from the library and I also use the computer at the library to search for some new books so I can enhance my skill set and also broaden my knowledge every time I visit.

The phrase 'every time I did the last time' is incorrect and confusing. The sentence is about habitual present actions, so the past tense 'did' is inappropriate. Replacing it with 'every time I visit' correctly expresses the habitual action in the present tense.

× I really enjoy reading at the library because it gives me quiet and peaceful atmosphere and I can learn and enhance my knowledge every time I go there historically.

✓ I really enjoy reading at the library because it gives me a quiet and peaceful atmosphere and I can learn and enhance my knowledge every time I go there.

The word 'historically' is incorrectly used here; it does not fit the context. Also, 'quiet and peaceful atmosphere' needs the article 'a' before 'quiet'. Removing 'historically' and adding 'a' corrects the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× Chinese kids often go to the library, they also really love reading and also discovering more a variety of new books, so they can also broaden the knowledge and enhance their skill sets.

✓ Chinese kids often go to the library; they also really love reading and discovering a variety of new books, so they can also broaden their knowledge and enhance their skill sets.

The phrase 'discovering more a variety of new books' is incorrect; 'a variety of' should come before 'new books' without 'more'. Also, 'the knowledge' should be 'their knowledge' to indicate possession. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.