Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'or' and 'every another day'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I like to learn new things. For example, I usually borrow books related to my studies or personal interests to improve my knowledge.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and is incomplete. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like 'uh'.

例: I usually go to the library to study because it is quiet and peaceful. Additionally, I borrow books that help me with my coursework.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by removing filler words and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I often visited the school library to borrow comic books and storybooks. I preferred reading fun books instead of academic ones.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many filler words. Try to give a direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because schools and universities provide access to many books. Moreover, libraries help children improve their reading skills and knowledge.

× Yes, or it is a place where I would rather practice or learn new things by getting new books issued every another day or often use my university's library for.

✓ Yes, it is a place where I would rather practice or learn new things by getting new books issued every other day, and I often use my university's library for that.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'or' to connect ideas that should be joined by 'and' to show addition. Also, 'every another day' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'every other day'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× I usually go there to study and issue books. Obviously uh, because uh the library consists of and amounts of book and the library is quite so I can.

✓ I usually go there to study and borrow books. Obviously, the library consists of a large number of books, and the library is quiet, so I can concentrate.

The phrase 'issue books' is incorrect in this context; 'borrow books' is appropriate. 'Consists of and amounts of book' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'consists of a large number of books'. The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity, so it has been restructured for meaning and correctness.

× Yes, or in school days I used to go to my library uh for getting comic books or story related books.

✓ Yes, during my school days, I used to go to my library to get comic books or story-related books.

The phrase 'in school days' is incorrect; 'during my school days' is correct. 'For getting' should be 'to get' to express purpose. 'Story related books' should be hyphenated as 'story-related books' to form a compound adjective.

× So usually I used to go to read fun books rather than academic books.

✓ So usually, I used to go to read fun books rather than academic ones.

The phrase 'academic books' is repetitive; using 'academic ones' avoids repetition and is more natural. Also, a comma after 'So usually' improves readability.

× Yes, I think, Oh, people of all the countries, uh, usually use library library, something which is uh, uh, provided in all, uh, all types of schools or universities.

✓ Yes, I think people from all countries usually use libraries, which are provided in all types of schools and universities.

The phrase 'people of all the countries' should be 'people from all countries'. 'Use library library' is a repetition and incorrect; it should be 'use libraries'. 'Provided in all, all types of schools or universities' should be 'provided in all types of schools and universities' for correct preposition and conjunction use.