Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and give a clear, concise answer. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a bit more detail to make your answer natural and effective.

例: I don't often go to the library because I prefer reading books online, which is more convenient for me. Therefore, I find the library less essential in my daily life.

提案: Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: When I visit the library, I usually read novels because I love stories. Additionally, I sometimes explore other genres to broaden my reading experience.

提案: Reduce filler words and complete your sentences clearly. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: No, I didn't go to the library as a child because my parents bought me many books. Therefore, I usually read at home with their guidance.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and provide specific reasons to support your answer.

例: Nowadays, technology has advanced significantly, so many children in China prefer reading books online rather than visiting libraries.

× I don't go to the library because umm, I think I can read books online on the Internet and umm, so does library.

✓ I don't go to the library because umm, I think I can read books online on the Internet and umm, so does the library.

The pronoun 'so does library' is incorrect because 'library' is a noun and needs a definite article 'the' before it. The correct phrase is 'so does the library.' This is an example of incorrect use of pronouns and articles.

× I think if I go to the library, I will read a lot of books. Mostly I think I will read novels because I love reading novels and sometimes I will pick some kind of what's called.

✓ I think if I go to the library, I will read a lot of books. Mostly, I think I will read novels because I love reading novels and sometimes I will pick some kind of book, what's it called.

The phrase 'some kind of what's called' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'some kind of book, what's it called' to clarify the object. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure error.

× No, I didn't because my parents, umm, bought me a lot of books and I always read those, those things umm, at my, at my house, umm, with my parents, umm, along with me teaching, uh, teaching, uh, the.

✓ No, I didn't because my parents bought me a lot of books and I always read those things at my house with my parents, who also taught me.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear, especially the phrase 'along with me teaching, uh, teaching, uh, the.' It needs restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness. This is a sentence structure error.

× I think these days umm the technology is umm developed so much so I think people all around the world is umm is like more likely to read, read books online like me.

✓ I think these days, umm, technology has developed so much that I think people all around the world are more likely to read books online like me.

The phrase 'people all around the world is' is incorrect because 'people' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are.' Also, 'the technology' should be 'technology' without 'the' in this context. This is a subject-verb agreement error and article error.