Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to improve flow. Also, use articles correctly, for example, 'the library' instead of just 'library'.

例: No, I don't often go to the library. I usually visit it only when I have important work to do, otherwise, I prefer other places.

提案: Your answer provides good content but is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Use linking words like 'and' or 'which' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'very much cool'; instead, use precise adjectives. Try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences.

例: In the library, I usually read books and novels, which helps me improve my vocabulary and grammar. Moreover, the calm and soothing environment makes me feel relaxed.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Use past tense consistently when talking about the past. Avoid repeating phrases like 'when I was a kid' multiple times. Also, clarify your points with linking words and correct article usage.

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I frequently went to the school library where I could read books and play games like puzzles.

提案: Your answer is honest but could be more structured. Start with a direct response, then add supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'boost up their energy'; instead, use more natural expressions.

例: I am not sure about Chinese kids, but in my country, many children often visit the library to relax and spend their free time productively.

× Whenever I have any important piece of work, then only I go to library.

✓ Whenever I have any important piece of work, then only I go to the library.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both the speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' here is incorrect.

× In the library, I usually spend my time by reading the books and novels as it helps me to improve my vocabulary as well as my grammar skills are also enhanced.

✓ In the library, I usually spend my time reading books and novels as it helps me improve my vocabulary and also enhances my grammar skills.

The phrase 'spend my time by reading' is incorrect; 'spend time reading' is the correct form. Also, 'the books and novels' is better as 'books and novels' unless specific ones are meant. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.

× While sitting in the library, we can also feel so much relaxed as the environment is very much cool and soothing.

✓ While sitting in the library, I can also feel very relaxed as the environment is very cool and soothing.

The pronoun 'we' is inconsistent with the speaker's perspective; 'I' should be used. Also, 'feel so much relaxed' is incorrect; 'feel very relaxed' is the correct expression.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I frequently go to the library as in my school there was a library when where we can read the books and we can play, play different games like puzzles and so on.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I frequently went to the library as in my school there was a library where we could read books and play different games like puzzles and so on.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. 'When where' is incorrect; 'where' alone suffices. 'Can' should be changed to 'could' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'the books' is better as 'books' unless specific books are meant.

× So I usually go to the library when I was a kid.

✓ So I usually went to the library when I was a kid.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a kid'. 'Usually' can be used with past tense to indicate habitual past actions.

× Well, talking about the Chinese kid, I don't know much about them, but in my country, yes, many kids often go to the library to spend their free time and to relax their mind as well as to boost up their energy there.

✓ Well, talking about Chinese kids, I don't know much about them, but in my country, yes, many kids often go to the library to spend their free time, relax their minds, and boost their energy there.

'Chinese kid' is singular but 'them' is plural; it should be 'Chinese kids' to match the plural pronoun. Also, 'relax their mind' should be 'relax their minds' to agree in number. 'Boost up' is better as 'boost' for natural usage.