Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it provides a quiet environment for studying and researching. Moreover, it is a great place for people to focus on their work and gain knowledge.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, try to be more specific about the types of assignments or research you do.

例: Usually, I complete my assignments and read various books in the library. Additionally, I sometimes conduct research on social topics to deepen my understanding.

提案: Your answer has good content but the grammar and sentence structure need improvement. Avoid unclear phrases and try to use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I have loved going to the library since I was a child. It had a special area for children where we could read books quietly without disturbing others.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more concise and better organised. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition.

例: Unfortunately, Chinese children do not often visit libraries. Although playing sports outdoors is beneficial, I believe they should spend more time in libraries to broaden their horizons and learn about different cultures and places beyond their own city or country.

× Never with a very good place for citizens to focus on the books, to study, to get knowledge.

✓ It is a very good place for citizens to focus on books, to study, and to gain knowledge.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it a sentence fragment. To correct this, a subject ('It') and verb ('is') are added to form a complete sentence. Also, 'the books' is changed to 'books' for general reference, and 'to get knowledge' is better expressed as 'to gain knowledge' for natural English usage.

× I usually accomplish my assignment and read books in the library.

✓ I usually complete my assignments and read books in the library.

The verb 'accomplish' is not typically used with 'assignment'; 'complete' is more appropriate. Also, 'assignment' should be plural ('assignments') to indicate multiple tasks, which is more natural in this context.

× Sometimes I might do some society research in it.

✓ Sometimes I might do some social research there.

The phrase 'society research' is incorrect; the correct term is 'social research'. Also, 'in it' is awkward when referring to the library; 'there' is more natural.

× Yes, I'd like to go to the library since a child I fell in love with it.

✓ Yes, I have liked going to the library since I was a child; I fell in love with it then.

The original sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'I'd like' (I would like) is inappropriate for a past habit. The present perfect 'have liked' expresses a continuing state from past to present. Also, 'since a child' should be 'since I was a child' for clarity.

× Likely the library has a place for children like me.

✓ The library probably has a place for children like me.

'Likely' is an adverb and should not start the sentence here; 'probably' is more appropriate. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× We can read books there and we can make little noises there so that the other citizens will not be.

✓ We can read books there and make little noises, but other visitors will not be disturbed.

The phrase 'the other citizens will not be' is incomplete and unclear. It should specify what will not happen to others, e.g., 'will not be disturbed'. Also, 'citizens' is better replaced with 'visitors' in this context.

× Many children in China like to go outside to play some sports, which is good of course, but they should go to the library more, I think, to extend their horizons to know other things don't happen in their own country or city.

✓ Many children in China like to go outside to play sports, which is good of course, but I think they should go to the library more to broaden their horizons and learn about things that don't happen in their own country or city.

The phrase 'play some sports' is better as 'play sports'. The clause 'to extend their horizons to know other things don't happen' is awkward; 'broaden their horizons and learn about things that don't happen' is clearer and grammatically correct.