Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas and improve sentence structure for better flow. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library in the evenings because I enjoy learning new things. The library has many books that help me expand my knowledge on various topics.

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas and improve grammar for clarity.

例: I usually look for science books in the library because I am interested in learning more about scientific topics.

提案: Your answer could be clearer and more natural by improving sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details.

例: When I was a kid, I only visited the library at my school. We went there every Thursday to explore topics that interested us, which helped me develop an interest in science.

提案: Avoid vague expressions and improve grammar. Be more direct and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, try to provide a clearer comparison or opinion.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese children, but in my country, children usually visit their school libraries regularly because they have large collections of books for learning.

× There are a number of books available in library that helps us to know more about something.

✓ There are a number of books available in the library that help us to know more about something.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' to specify the particular place. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'books'.

× There are a number of books available in library that helps us to know more about something.

✓ There are a number of books available in the library that help us to know more about something.

The verb 'help' should be in the base form to agree with the plural subject 'books' in present tense.

× Well I am a person who loves to know more about science and when I went to library I usually look for scientific knowledgeable pieces of books so that I could get more knowledge on that.

✓ Well, I am a person who loves to know more about science and when I go to the library I usually look for scientific knowledgeable pieces of books so that I can get more knowledge on that.

The sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present habitual action 'usually look'. To express habitual actions, present tense 'go' and 'look' should be used. Also, 'could' should be 'can' to indicate ability in present context. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library'.

× Well I am a person who loves to know more about science and when I went to library I usually look for scientific knowledgeable pieces of books so that I could get more knowledge on that.

✓ Well, I am a person who loves to know more about science and when I go to the library I usually look for scientific knowledgeable pieces of books so that I can get more knowledge on that.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' to specify the particular place.

× When I was a kid, I went to library only in my school.

✓ When I was a kid, I went to the library only in my school.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' to specify the particular place.

× There was a big library over there where we went every Thursday to learn about new something of our interest and from there I get to have interest in science.

✓ There was a big library over there where we went every Thursday to learn about new things of our interest and from there I got to have interest in science.

The phrase 'new something' is incorrect; it should be 'new things'. Also, 'get' should be 'got' to maintain past tense consistency. The definite article 'the' is correctly used before 'library'.

× There was a big library over there where we went every Thursday to learn about new something of our interest and from there I get to have interest in science.

✓ There was a big library over there where we went every Thursday to learn about new things of our interest and from there I got to have interest in science.

The verb 'get' should be in past tense 'got' to agree with the past context of the sentence.

× Well, I don't have much idea about the Chinese kids that they went to library often, but in my nation children's usually went to library in their schools as there are big large libraries available in their schools for learning new things.

✓ Well, I don't have much idea about whether Chinese kids often go to the library, but in my nation, children usually go to the library in their schools as there are large libraries available in their schools for learning new things.

The phrase 'the Chinese kids that they went' is incorrect; 'whether Chinese kids often go' is more appropriate. 'Children's' is incorrect possessive; it should be 'children'. 'Went' should be 'go' to indicate habitual action. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library'. 'Big large' is redundant; 'large' alone suffices.