Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct tense and avoid repeating phrases like 'from my mind'. Also, keep your answer concise and natural by limiting to 3-4 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I usually visit the library on weekends when I have free time. It helps me relax and take a break from stressful activities. I often read books there and sometimes listen to music with my headphones.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and some awkward phrasing. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly. Also, try to be more specific about the type of projects or studies you do to enrich your answer.

例: I usually read books in the library, and sometimes I work on my projects there because it offers a quiet environment. This helps me concentrate better on my studies and complete important tasks efficiently.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Clarify your ideas with specific details and use linking words to connect sentences logically.

例: Yes, when I was a child, I visited the library to do my homework because it was very quiet. I also attended many sessions there every week, which kept my interest in reading alive.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and use correct sentence structures. Avoid contradicting statements and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to explain reasons logically.

例: In my opinion, Chinese children do not visit libraries very often nowadays. This is because with rapid technological development, they prefer learning online, which is more convenient than going to the library.

× Yes, usually when I was free and I have a lot of time on weekends I visit to the library so that I can relax my mind and all stressful activities from my mind.

✓ Yes, usually when I am free and have a lot of time on weekends, I visit the library so that I can relax my mind and relieve all stressful activities from my mind.

The sentence mixes past tense 'was' with present tense 'have' and 'visit'. Since the question is about habitual actions, present tense should be used consistently. Also, 'visit to the library' is incorrect; 'visit the library' is correct.

× Yes, usually when I was free and I have a lot of time on weekends I visit to the library so that I can relax my mind and all stressful activities from my mind.

✓ Yes, usually when I am free and have a lot of time on weekends, I visit the library so that I can relax my mind and relieve all stressful activities from my mind.

The verb 'visit' does not require the preposition 'to' after it. The correct form is 'visit the library', not 'visit to the library'.

× I visit to the library so that I can relax my mind and all stressful activities from my mind.

✓ I visit the library so that I can relax my mind and relieve all stressful activities from my mind.

The phrase 'relax my mind and all stressful activities from my mind' is awkward. It should be 'relax my mind and relieve all stressful activities from my mind' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× I visit to the library so that I can relax my mind and all stressful activities from my mind.

✓ I visit the library so that I can relax my mind and relieve all stressful activities from my mind.

The phrase 'relax my mind and all stressful activities from my mind' is awkward. It should be 'relax my mind and relieve all stressful activities from my mind' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× I read books there and sometimes enjoy music by using my headphones.

✓ I read books there and sometimes enjoy music using my headphones.

The phrase 'by using my headphones' is unnecessarily wordy. 'Using my headphones' is more natural and concise.

× Usually I read books and sometimes I go to the library and do my project work because it is a good place to do your important work and library consists to offer quite environment which help me to concentrate better on my work.

✓ Usually I read books and sometimes I go to the library and do my project work because it is a good place to do important work and the library offers a quiet environment which helps me concentrate better on my work.

The phrase 'library consists to offer quite environment' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'the library offers a quiet environment'. Also, 'quite' should be 'quiet'. 'Help me to concentrate' is better as 'helps me concentrate'.

× library consists to offer quite environment which help me to concentrate better on my work.

✓ the library offers a quiet environment which helps me concentrate better on my work.

The word 'quite' is an adverb meaning 'very', but the intended meaning is 'quiet' (silent). Also, subject-verb agreement requires 'helps' instead of 'help'.

× So I oftenly do my project work, my studies and so on.

✓ So I often do my project work, my studies, and so on.

The word 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'often'. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in a list.

× Yes, when I was child I visit library to do my homework because it is a very quiet place.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I visited the library to do my homework because it was a very quiet place.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'visited' and 'was' should be used. Also, 'a child' requires the article 'a'.

× Yes, when I was child I visit library to do my homework because it is a very quiet place.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I visited the library to do my homework because it was a very quiet place.

The noun 'child' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'library' is a countable noun and needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific library.

× Sometimes I find interesting that there was many sessions in the libraries that I attend every week which make my interest alive in the library.

✓ Sometimes I found it interesting that there were many sessions in the libraries that I attended every week which kept my interest alive in the library.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'found', 'were', 'attended', and 'kept' should be used. 'Many sessions' is plural, so 'were' is correct. Also, 'make' should be 'kept' to match past tense.

× Sometimes I find interesting that there was many sessions in the libraries that I attend every week which make my interest alive in the library.

✓ Sometimes I found it interesting that there were many sessions in the libraries that I attended every week which kept my interest alive in the library.

The verbs should be in past tense to match the time frame of the events described.

× So that why so that's why I visit to the library.

✓ So that's why I visit the library.

The phrase 'visit to the library' is incorrect; 'visit the library' is correct. Also, 'So that why so' is redundant and should be simplified to 'So that's why'.

× According to my point of view, I think that Chinese could not go not much go to the library because these days the development increase day by day and due to the various developments, children oftenly visit to the libraries because they can learn more things online than libraries.

✓ In my opinion, I think that Chinese children do not go much to the library because these days development increases day by day and due to various developments, children often visit libraries because they can learn more things online than in libraries.

The phrase 'According to my point of view' is awkward; 'In my opinion' is better. 'Could not go not much go' is incorrect and should be 'do not go much'. 'Oftenly' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'often'. 'Visit to the libraries' should be 'visit libraries'. Also, 'more things online than libraries' should be 'more things online than in libraries' for clarity.

× children oftenly visit to the libraries because they can learn more things online than libraries.

✓ children often visit libraries because they can learn more things online than in libraries.

The verb 'visit' does not require the preposition 'to'. Also, comparison requires 'than in libraries' to be clear.