Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'I prefer to sit there only and I enjoy it.' Instead, say 'I prefer studying at home because I have a personal library there.' Also, use articles correctly, for example, 'the library' instead of 'library'.

例: No, I don't often go to the library nowadays because I have a personal library at home, and I prefer studying there.

提案: Your answer needs better grammar and clarity. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, link your ideas logically. For example, say 'I usually prepare for exams in the library. Additionally, since I enjoy drawing and painting, I often create digital art on my iPad.'

例: I usually prepare for exams in the library. Additionally, since I enjoy drawing and painting, I often create digital art on my iPad.

提案: Your answer is too long and has grammatical errors. Use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I was not fond of studying. Instead, I enjoyed playing with friends and bicycling.'

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I was not fond of studying. Instead, I enjoyed playing with friends and bicycling.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use proper sentence structure and linking words. For example, say 'In my opinion, Chinese children do not often use the library because about 70% of them find it difficult to sit quietly and read for long periods.'

例: In my opinion, Chinese children do not often use the library because about 70% of them find it difficult to sit quietly and read for long periods.

× No, I don't go to library nowadays as I have my library at home and I prefer to sit there only and I enjoy it.

✓ No, I don't go to the library nowadays as I have my library at home and I prefer to sit there only and I enjoy it.

The noun 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific library. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.

× I do my exam preparation and I am very fond of drawing and painting, so I makes usually a digital ad in my iPad.

✓ I do my exam preparation and I am very fond of drawing and painting, so I usually make a digital ad on my iPad.

The verb 'makes' does not agree with the subject 'I'. The correct form is 'make'. Also, the adverb 'usually' should be placed before the verb 'make'. Additionally, the preposition 'on' is appropriate for devices like 'iPad'.

× No, I did not go to the library when I was kid as I am not very fond of studying and reading when I was kid because I have very different hobbies like playing with other kids and bicycling and.

✓ No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid as I was not very fond of studying and reading when I was a kid because I had very different hobbies like playing with other kids and bicycling.

The phrase 'when I was kid' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'kid'. Also, the tense should be consistent in past tense ('was' and 'had') to match the time frame. The sentence was incomplete and has been corrected accordingly.

× No Chinese kids not using library very much because as my opinion 70% children are not cannot sit quietly and read in the library so often.

✓ No, Chinese kids do not use the library very much because, in my opinion, 70% of children cannot sit quietly and read in the library very often.

The original sentence has multiple errors: missing auxiliary verb 'do' for negation, incorrect verb form 'using' instead of 'use', awkward phrasing 'because as my opinion' corrected to 'because, in my opinion,' and incorrect modal verb usage 'are not cannot' corrected to 'cannot'. Also, '70% children' requires 'of' after the percentage.