Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to directly answer the question first, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you prefer studying at home, mentioning the silence in the library makes you uncomfortable.

例: I don't often go to the library because I prefer studying at home. Although the library is quiet, I find the silence there a bit uncomfortable, especially near my exams. Therefore, I usually study in a more relaxed environment at home.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and repetitive. Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your actions in the library. Avoid repeating words and finish your thoughts fully.

例: I usually go to the library to borrow books that I don't have at home. I keep them for a few days to study and then return them on time.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and repetitive. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to use varied vocabulary to express your enjoyment and habits clearly.

例: Yes, I used to go to the school library as a child. I enjoyed reading many storybooks there, which I loved during my childhood. I often borrowed books, read them carefully, and returned them on time.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains generalizations. Try to give a direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid repeating phrases and use appropriate linking words for coherence.

例: From what I know, many Chinese kids often go to libraries because they value education and enjoy learning. Therefore, they prefer visiting libraries to gain more knowledge.

× Well I usually don't prefer going library because I think near my exams.

✓ Well, I usually don't prefer going to the library because I think my exams are near.

The verb 'prefer' is correctly followed by the gerund 'going', but the preposition 'to' is missing before 'library'. Also, the phrase 'I think near my exams' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'I think my exams are near' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I just alternate days I go to library but usually I prefer studying at home.

✓ I just alternate days when I go to the library, but usually I prefer studying at home.

The phrase 'alternate days I go to library' lacks the preposition 'when' to connect the clauses properly and 'to the library' requires the definite article 'the'. Adding 'when' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.

× As the silence in the library I feel more I've become more uncomfortable in library detail.

✓ Because of the silence in the library, I feel more uncomfortable in the library environment.

The sentence is unclear and incorrectly structured. 'As the silence' should be 'Because of the silence' to indicate cause. Also, 'in library detail' is incorrect; 'in the library environment' or 'in the library' is appropriate. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× I usually go to library for for taking books to my home which are not available with me.

✓ I usually go to the library to take books home which are not available with me.

The phrase 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the'. The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used twice and should be replaced with 'to' before the verb 'take'. Also, 'to my home' can be simplified to 'home' for naturalness.

× So I borrow it from the library for some days and then I return it and and as I.

✓ So I borrow them from the library for some days and then I return them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'books', which is plural, so 'them' should be used. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and and as I', which is incomplete and should be removed for clarity.

× Of course in my school there was a library for kids and as a kid I used to enjoy going to library because it used to have many storybooks which I usually love reading it in my childhood, so I used to borrow it and study and return them on time.

✓ Of course, in my school there was a library for kids, and as a kid, I used to enjoy going to the library because it used to have many storybooks which I usually loved reading in my childhood, so I used to borrow them, study, and return them on time.

The phrase 'going to library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Love reading it' is incorrect because 'it' refers to 'many storybooks' (plural), so 'them' is appropriate. Also, 'usually love' should be in past tense 'usually loved' to match the past context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× As per my knowledge, I think Chinese kids mostly go to libraries because they are very intelligent and are very creative to learn more about knowledge.

✓ As per my knowledge, I think Chinese kids mostly go to libraries because they are very intelligent and very creative in learning more knowledge.

The phrase 'creative to learn more about knowledge' is awkward. The correct preposition is 'in' before the gerund 'learning'. Also, 'learn more about knowledge' is better expressed as 'learning more knowledge' for naturalness.

× So from my knowledge I think yes they prefer going to library.

✓ So from my knowledge, I think yes, they prefer going to the library.

The phrase 'going to library' requires the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Adding commas improves readability.