Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear due to grammar issues. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I am currently studying gerontology and palliative care nursing. I need to use the library resources to find books that help me with my courses.

提案: Your answer provides some details but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and complete your sentences. Also, try to be more specific about your activities in the library.

例: Usually, I sit in a quiet corner with my books and laptop. I review the lessons and PowerPoint slides given by my teacher, and I prepare notes to help me revise later.

提案: Your answer is understandable but a bit repetitive and incomplete. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to improve flow.

例: When I was a kid, I rarely went to the library because our school schedule did not include a library period. Instead, we had assigned classes like science and maths during that time.

提案: Your answer is honest but lacks confidence and detail. Try to give a more complete response by expressing your opinion clearly and providing reasons or examples, even if you are unsure.

例: I am not very familiar with Chinese kids' habits, but I think they probably go to the library when they have the opportunity, as many students like to study there.

× Yes I do, nowadays I am studying GPC and course gerontology and palliative care nursing course and because of that I needed some help for the books so I'm going to the library for that reason nowadays.

✓ Yes I do, nowadays I am studying GPC and the gerontology and palliative care nursing course and because of that I need some help with the books so I'm going to the library for that reason nowadays.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'I needed' should be 'I need' to match the present continuous tense 'I am studying' and 'I'm going'. Also, 'course gerontology and palliative care nursing course' is redundant and missing an article before 'gerontology'. The correction ensures tense consistency and proper article usage.

× Yes I do, nowadays I am studying GPC and course gerontology and palliative care nursing course and because of that I needed some help for the books so I'm going to the library for that reason nowadays.

✓ Yes I do, nowadays I am studying GPC and the gerontology and palliative care nursing course and because of that I need some help with the books so I'm going to the library for that reason nowadays.

The phrase 'help for the books' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'help with the books' because 'help with' is used when referring to assistance related to something.

× Yes I do, nowadays I am studying GPC and course gerontology and palliative care nursing course and because of that I needed some help for the books so I'm going to the library for that reason nowadays.

✓ Yes I do, nowadays I am studying GPC and the gerontology and palliative care nursing course and because of that I need some help with the books so I'm going to the library for that reason nowadays.

The phrase 'course gerontology and palliative care nursing course' lacks the definite article 'the' before 'gerontology' and is repetitive. Adding 'the' and removing redundancy improves clarity and correctness.

× In the library, usually I sit in the corner and I have my books and laptop.

✓ In the library, I usually sit in the corner with my books and laptop.

The adverb 'usually' is better placed before the verb for natural sentence flow. Also, 'I have my books and laptop' is better expressed as 'with my books and laptop' to indicate possession while sitting.

× I just go to my lessons or PPT which was given to us by my teacher.

✓ I just go through my lessons or the PPT which was given to us by my teacher.

The phrase 'go to my lessons or PPT' is unclear. 'Go through' better expresses reviewing or studying the lessons or PPT. Also, 'the PPT' requires the definite article 'the'.

× So I just prepared some notes so that I can revise them later for.

✓ So I just prepare some notes so that I can revise them later.

The sentence ends with an unnecessary preposition 'for'. Removing 'for' completes the sentence correctly. Also, 'prepared' should be 'prepare' to match the present tense context.

× So I just prepared some notes so that I can revise them later for.

✓ So I just prepare some notes so that I can revise them later.

The verb 'prepared' is in past tense but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'prepare' is appropriate.

× When I was a kid, that time I didn't have that much time or that opportunity to go to library because in the school we were having our assigned periods, for example, science, maths and in that period we didn't have that library period.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't have much time or the opportunity to go to the library because at school we had assigned periods, for example, science and maths, and during those periods we didn't have a library period.

The phrase 'go to library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'In the school' should be 'at school'. 'That time' is redundant and removed for clarity. 'That much time' is better as 'much time'. 'We were having' is better as 'we had' for past habitual action. 'That library period' should be 'a library period' as it is one of many possible periods.

× So I didn't get.

✓ So I didn't get the chance to go.

The sentence 'So I didn't get.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'the chance to go' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× Unfortunately, I don't have that much idea about Chinese kids because I don't have any Chinese friends, so I'm not sure about them.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't have much idea about Chinese kids because I don't have any Chinese friends, so I'm not sure about them.

The phrase 'that much idea' is incorrect; 'much idea' is the correct form. The pronoun 'them' correctly refers to 'Chinese kids'.