Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, you can say: "Yes, I usually visit the library twice a month because it is near my home in our village. I enjoy reading various books and articles there."

例: Yes, I usually visit the library twice a month because it is near my home in our village. I enjoy reading various books and articles there.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, use more precise vocabulary. For example: "In the library, I usually read emotional novels because I enjoy that genre. Additionally, I sometimes read interesting articles."

例: In the library, I usually read emotional novels because I enjoy that genre. Additionally, I sometimes read interesting articles.

提案: Your answer has tense inconsistencies and is somewhat confusing. Use past tense when talking about the past and present tense for current facts. Also, avoid redundancy and improve coherence with linking words. For example: "When I was a kid, I went to the library about once a month because it was far from my home. However, now that the library is rebuilt near my house, I visit it twice a month."

例: When I was a kid, I went to the library about once a month because it was far from my home. However, now that the library is rebuilt near my house, I visit it twice a month.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to give a more general opinion or admit if you are unsure, but politely. For example: "I am not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think many do because libraries are important for learning."

例: I am not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think many do because libraries are important for learning.

× Yes, I often go to the library nearly twice a month because there is a library in our home village and it is near my house and that's why I go there and read a lot of books and articles in the library.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library nearly twice a month because there is a library in our home village, and it is near my house. That's why I go there and read a lot of books and articles in the library.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with multiple independent clauses joined by 'and' without proper punctuation. Adding commas and splitting into two sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In the library I usually read the books such as emotional books because I like these types of books and sometimes I read an article which I like and that's the two things that I did in the library.

✓ In the library, I usually read books such as emotional books because I like these types of books, and sometimes I read articles which I like. Those are the two things that I do in the library.

The phrase 'the books' is incorrect when referring generally; 'books' without 'the' is appropriate. Also, 'an article' should be plural 'articles' to match 'sometimes'. The phrase 'that's the two things that I did' is incorrect; it should be 'Those are the two things that I do' to match present tense and plural subject.

× When I was a kid I go to the library nearly once a month because at that time the library is far away from my home, but it now rebuilt near my house and that's why that time I did not go.

✓ When I was a kid, I went to the library nearly once a month because at that time the library was far away from my home, but it has now been rebuilt near my house, and that's why at that time I did not go.

The verbs 'go' and 'is' should be in past tense 'went' and 'was' to match the past time frame. 'It now rebuilt' is incorrect; it should be 'it has now been rebuilt' to indicate present perfect passive. Also, 'that time' should be preceded by 'at' for correct preposition usage.

× And nowadays I go to the library twice a month.

✓ Nowadays, I go to the library twice a month.

Adding a comma after 'Nowadays' improves sentence clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct in present tense.

× I do not know that the Chinese kids often go to the library because I am not interested in knowing about the others as I am busy in my own work and that's why I did not go that Chinese go to the library or not.

✓ I do not know whether Chinese kids often go to the library because I am not interested in knowing about others as I am busy with my own work, and that's why I do not know if Chinese kids go to the library or not.

The phrase 'I did not go that Chinese go to the library or not' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'I do not know if Chinese kids go to the library or not.' Also, 'knowing about the others' should be 'knowing about others' without 'the'. 'Busy in my own work' should be 'busy with my own work' for correct preposition usage.