Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to answer directly and clearly. Avoid redundancy and incorrect grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say: "No, I don't often go to the library because I'm not a good reader. However, I do look for notes online."

例: No, I don't often go to the library because I'm not a good reader. However, I do look for notes online to help with my studies.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Be specific about what you do and why. For example: "I usually read storybooks in the library because they give me a magical feeling and inspire me."

例: I usually read storybooks in the library because they give me a magical feeling and inspire me.

提案: Try to use correct grammar and vocabulary. Be clear and specific. Use linking words to explain reasons. For example: "No, I didn't go to the library as a kid because I didn't know much about it, and my city didn't have a good library."

例: No, I didn't go to the library as a kid because I didn't know much about it, and my city didn't have a good library.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating phrases. If you don't know, say so clearly and briefly. For example: "I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but I think some of them might go to the library."

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but I think some of them might go to the library.

× No, I'm not.

✓ No, I don't.

The response 'No, I'm not' is incorrect because the question asks about frequency of going to the library, which requires a verb phrase, not a state of being. The correct negative response is 'No, I don't' (meaning 'I don't often go').

× I don't like to go to the library, but on the other hand I go through some notes, go through some webs to get some notes.

✓ I don't like to go to the library, but on the other hand I go through some notes and browse some websites to get information.

The phrase 'go through some webs' is incorrect; 'webs' is not used to mean websites. The correct phrase is 'browse some websites'. Also, 'go through some notes' is acceptable but adding 'and' improves clarity.

× I have some books. And read it and seriously, I liked story books and it give me some magical. Power to me. So I like storybooks.

✓ I have some books and I read them. Seriously, I like story books because they give me some magical power. So I like storybooks.

The original sentences are fragmented and have subject-verb agreement errors ('it give' should be 'they give'). Also, 'liked' should be 'like' to match present tense. Combining sentences improves flow.

× No, actually I didn't.

✓ No, actually I didn't go.

The sentence 'No, actually I didn't.' is incomplete because the verb is missing. It should be 'I didn't go' to complete the negative past tense response.

× I don't have enough knowledge about the library and my cities also don't have a good library, so I didn't go to library when I was a hit.

✓ I didn't have enough knowledge about the library and my city also didn't have a good library, so I didn't go to the library when I was a kid.

'My cities' should be 'my city' if referring to one city. 'Go to library' needs the definite article 'the library'. 'When I was a hit' is a typo; it should be 'when I was a kid'. Also, tense consistency is important.

× Since I'm a Sri Lankan, I don't know about Chinese kids. I don't know how how they are, I don't know how they are going or not, but maybe they can.

✓ Since I'm Sri Lankan, I don't know about Chinese kids. I don't know how they are or whether they go to the library, but maybe they do.

The phrase 'how how they are' is a repetition error. 'How they are going or not' is unclear; it should be 'whether they go to the library or not'. 'Maybe they can' is vague; 'maybe they do' is clearer in context.