Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say "Yes, I often go to the library in my spare time because it helps me gain knowledge and improve my communication skills."

例: Yes, I often go to the library in my spare time because it helps me gain knowledge and improve my communication skills.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific details using linking words. For example, "In the library, I usually read books about motivational speakers and learn about communication skills, as well as topics like historical buildings."

例: In the library, I usually read books about motivational speakers and learn about communication skills, as well as topics like historical buildings.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat confusing. Use past tense correctly and provide clear supporting details. For example, "Yes, when I was a kid, I often went to the library at school with my teacher, where I read many books that helped me gain knowledge and experience."

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I often went to the library at school with my teacher, where I read many books that helped me gain knowledge and experience.

提案: Your answer is too general and contains stereotypes. Try to be more specific and avoid generalizations. For example, "Yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library because they value education and want to secure a good future."

例: Yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library because they value education and want to secure a good future.

× When I have a spare time then I usually go to library because in library I gain knowledge and so many communication skills.

✓ When I have spare time, I usually go to the library because in the library I gain knowledge and many communication skills.

The phrase 'a spare time' is incorrect because 'time' in this context is uncountable and should not have an article 'a'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. 'So many communication skills' is better expressed as 'many communication skills' without 'so'.

× When I have a spare time then I usually go to library because in library I gain knowledge and so many communication skills.

✓ When I have spare time, I usually go to the library because in the library I gain knowledge and many communication skills.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.

× Are you still doing library? Read many books like motivational speakers and and other communication skills like knowledge of historical buildings and so on.

✓ Do you still go to the library? I read many books, such as those by motivational speakers, and other materials on communication skills, like knowledge of historical buildings, and so on.

The original sentence 'Are you still doing library?' is incorrect in structure and meaning. The verb 'doing' is not appropriate here; 'go to the library' is correct. Also, the sentence is fragmented and lacks proper connectors and articles.

× Yes, when I am a kid I go many time in library like school.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I went many times to the library, like at school.

The sentence refers to past time, so 'am' should be 'was', 'go' should be 'went', and 'many time' should be 'many times'. Also, 'in library' should be 'to the library'.

× When I when I am in school then my school teacher go went to the library and and I read many books such as knowledge and experience that all the.

✓ When I was in school, my school teacher went to the library, and I read many books that gave me knowledge and experience.

The sentence has tense errors: 'am' should be 'was', 'go went' is incorrect; only 'went' is needed. The sentence is also incomplete and needs restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, always. Chinese kid often go to library because Chinese are very intelligent and they secure their future.

✓ Yes, always. Chinese kids often go to the library because Chinese people are very intelligent and they secure their future.

'Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids' to agree with 'often go'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Chinese' as a noun referring to people should be 'Chinese people' for clarity.