Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences more concise and grammatically correct. Also, avoid repeating words like 'library' unnecessarily. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: When I was younger, I used to visit the library three or four times a week to borrow books. However, nowadays, I have a busy schedule, so I rarely find time to go there.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many repetitions and incomplete thoughts. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: When I go to the library, I usually prefer to study because it offers a quiet environment. Additionally, I enjoy borrowing books to learn more about different subjects.

提案: Your answer starts well but is incomplete and lacks supporting details. Make sure to complete your sentences and provide specific reasons or examples to enrich your response. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, when I was a kid, my mother often took me to the library to help me expand my knowledge. I enjoyed reading storybooks there, which improved my imagination and vocabulary.

提案: Your answer is generally good but ends abruptly and could be more concise. Avoid redundancy like 'many' and 'often' together. Also, complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Many Chinese children visit libraries regularly to study and complete their school assignments because libraries offer a quiet environment and access to various educational resources. Moreover, some schools organize regular library visits to encourage reading habits.

× Well, living when I was younger, I used to go to the library to take out a book from library maybe 3 or 4 times a week.

✓ Well, when I was younger, I used to go to the library to take out a book maybe 3 or 4 times a week.

The phrase 'living when I was younger' is incorrect because 'living' is a present participle that does not fit here. The correct expression is 'when I was younger' to indicate a past time frame.

× Well, living when I was younger, I used to go to the library to take out a book from library maybe 3 or 4 times a week.

✓ Well, when I was younger, I used to go to the library to take out a book from the library maybe 3 or 4 times a week.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect.

× But nowadays since I'm busy, I have busy schedule, I don't have enough time to go to there.

✓ But nowadays, since I'm busy and have a busy schedule, I don't have enough time to go there.

The phrase 'go to there' is incorrect because 'there' already indicates a place, so the preposition 'to' is unnecessary and redundant.

× We when I when I go to library, I usually prefer to study.

✓ When I go to the library, I usually prefer to study.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words ('We when I when I') causing confusion. Simplifying to 'When I go to the library' corrects the sentence structure.

× We when I when I go to library, I usually prefer to study.

✓ When I go to the library, I usually prefer to study.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place.

× Additionally, I'm passionate about borrowing books because whenever I borrow whenever I borrow something from library, they it give.

✓ Additionally, I'm passionate about borrowing books because whenever I borrow something from the library, it gives me joy.

The sentence has repeated phrases and incorrect pronoun usage ('they it give'). 'Library' needs the article 'the', and 'it' correctly refers to 'something' or 'the library'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a kid, my mother would take me to the library to expand my knowledge. Additionally, when I was a.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, my mother would take me to the library to expand my knowledge.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'Additionally, when I was a.' which is incomplete and causes a sentence structure error. Removing the incomplete fragment corrects the sentence.

× Many Chinese kids often go to the library to study or complete their school assignments. Libraries provide a quiet environment and are accessible to a wide range of educational resources, which helps students improve their knowledge and skills. Additionally, some schools include children to visit libraries regularly to develop.

✓ Many Chinese kids often go to the library to study or complete their school assignments. Libraries provide a quiet environment and are accessible to a wide range of educational resources, which helps students improve their knowledge and skills. Additionally, some schools encourage children to visit libraries regularly to develop good study habits.

The phrase 'include children to visit libraries' is incorrect. The verb 'include' does not fit here; 'encourage' is appropriate. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'to develop' without specifying what is developed, so adding 'good study habits' completes the thought.