Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中时态混乱，表达不够自然，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议使用简单现在时描述习惯行为，避免冗长句子，注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I usually go to the library every day until it closes. I always take my computer there to read essays and plan for the next few days.

提案: 回答缺少主语，句子不完整且表达不清晰。建议每句话都要有主语，使用连词使句子更连贯，避免语法错误。

例: Well, I usually bring my computer to the library to read and correct my essays. Because the library is quiet, it helps me concentrate on my studies.

提案: 时态使用错误，句子结构混乱，表达不自然。建议使用过去时描述过去的习惯，句子要简洁明了，避免重复。

例: Yes, I sometimes went to the library with my parents when I was a kid. They wanted to motivate me to study hard.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，词汇使用错误，句子结构混乱。建议用简单句表达观点，避免使用错误词汇，内容要具体且相关。

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because their parents encourage them to study hard. They read books to prepare for school essays.

× Yeah, of course I went to the library every day and until the library closed and I will always take my computer there to get some essay and to my plan for the next days.

✓ Yeah, of course I go to the library every day until it closes, and I always take my computer there to work on some essays and plan for the next days.

这里学生使用了过去时态“went”，但描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“go”。另外，“until the library closed”应改为“until it closes”以保持时态一致。

× Yeah, of course I went to the library every day and until the library closed and I will always take my computer there to get some essay and to my plan for the next days.

✓ Yeah, of course I go to the library every day until it closes, and I always take my computer there to work on some essays and plan for the next days.

“to get some essay and to my plan”结构不正确，应使用动名词形式“working on some essays and planning for the next days”或简化为“work on some essays and plan”。

× Well, uh usually bring my computer there to read some essays and to correct my essay and to make a plan for the next few days 'cause the library is still quiet and there are many people started with me and made me concentrate my study.

✓ Well, I usually bring my computer there to read some essays, correct my essay, and make a plan for the next few days because the library is still quiet, and many people start with me and help me concentrate on my study.

“there are many people started with me and made me concentrate”时态错误，应使用一般现在时“start”和“help”，因为描述的是习惯性动作。

× Well, uh usually bring my computer there to read some essays and to correct my essay and to make a plan for the next few days 'cause the library is still quiet and there are many people started with me and made me concentrate my study.

✓ Well, I usually bring my computer there to read some essays, correct my essay, and make a plan for the next few days because the library is still quiet, and many people start with me and help me concentrate on my study.

“concentrate my study”中缺少介词，应为“concentrate on my study”。

× Yeah, sometimes when I'm a kid, I went to library with my parents.

✓ Yeah, sometimes when I was a kid, I went to the library with my parents.

“when I'm a kid”时态错误，应使用过去时“when I was a kid”。

× Yeah, sometimes when I'm a kid, I went to library with my parents.

✓ Yeah, sometimes when I was a kid, I went to the library with my parents.

“go to library”缺少冠词，应为“go to the library”。

× Does it like to read the books and they want to motivate me to study hard, so we always go to the library with my parents.

✓ They like to read books and want to motivate me to study hard, so we always go to the library with my parents.

“Does it like”用法错误，应改为“They like”。“the books”改为“books”更自然。

× Does it like to read the books and they want to motivate me to study hard, so we always go to the library with my parents.

✓ They like to read books and want to motivate me to study hard, so we always go to the library with my parents.

“to read the books”中“the”不必要，改为“read books”更自然。

× Yeah, of course, the Chinese kids are usually buying colors by their parents to study hard and, uh, to maintain Chinese children, they want to read more to prepare for their essays in the primary school or even the senior and junior high.

✓ Yeah, of course, Chinese kids are usually encouraged by their parents to study hard, and to maintain this, Chinese children want to read more to prepare for their essays in primary school or even senior and junior high school.

“buying colors by their parents”表达错误，应为“encouraged by their parents”。“the Chinese kids”中的“the”不必要。

× Yeah, of course, the Chinese kids are usually buying colors by their parents to study hard and, uh, to maintain Chinese children, they want to read more to prepare for their essays in the primary school or even the senior and junior high.

✓ Yeah, of course, Chinese kids are usually encouraged by their parents to study hard, and to maintain this, Chinese children want to read more to prepare for their essays in primary school or even senior and junior high school.

“buying colors by their parents”中“by”用法不当，应改为“encouraged by”。

× Yeah, of course, the Chinese kids are usually buying colors by their parents to study hard and, uh, to maintain Chinese children, they want to read more to prepare for their essays in the primary school or even the senior and junior high.

✓ Yeah, of course, Chinese kids are usually encouraged by their parents to study hard, and to maintain this, Chinese children want to read more to prepare for their essays in primary school or even senior and junior high school.

“the primary school”及“the senior and junior high”中“the”不必要，应去掉。