Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'and'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place where I can concentrate. Moreover, it offers a wide range of books and articles that help me with my studies.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding unnecessary phrases like 'Thank you' and by using linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and be more specific about your activities.

例: Usually, I go to the library to study and conduct research for my academic projects because it provides a quiet and conducive environment.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and has grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'but' correctly. Also, avoid long and unclear sentences.

例: No, I did not often go to the library as a child because I preferred playing outdoor games. However, I had many books at home, so I developed a reading habit early on.

提案: Your answer repeats phrases and can be more concise. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid redundancy. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structures.

例: Yes, many Chinese children often visit the library because their parents encourage daily reading habits from an early age, which helps them develop strong reading skills as they grow.

× Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place to concentrate and study for my required topics as well as it provides me a range of knowledge and books which is beneficial for my overall study purposes as well as it contains more most of the articles in the world.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place to concentrate and study for my required topics, and it provides me with a range of knowledge and books which are beneficial for my overall study purposes. It also contains most of the articles in the world.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'as well as' multiple times to connect clauses, which is not appropriate here. 'As well as' is not a coordinating conjunction and should not be used to join independent clauses. Instead, use 'and' or separate sentences for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place to concentrate and study for my required topics as well as it provides me a range of knowledge and books which is beneficial for my overall study purposes as well as it contains more most of the articles in the world.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place to concentrate and study for my required topics, and it provides me with a range of knowledge and books which are beneficial for my overall study purposes. It also contains most of the articles in the world.

The phrase 'provides me a range' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'provides me with a range'. Prepositions are important to show relationships between words, and 'with' is needed here to indicate what is being provided.

× Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place to concentrate and study for my required topics as well as it provides me a range of knowledge and books which is beneficial for my overall study purposes as well as it contains more most of the articles in the world.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place to concentrate and study for my required topics, and it provides me with a range of knowledge and books which are beneficial for my overall study purposes. It also contains most of the articles in the world.

The phrase 'books which is beneficial' is incorrect because 'books' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are' instead of 'is'. Subject-verb agreement must be maintained for grammatical correctness.

× Usually I go to the library for my study purposes and also for my research for my academic use.

✓ Usually, I go to the library for my study purposes and also for my academic research.

The phrase 'research for my academic use' is awkward and incorrect. The correct preposition is 'academic research' without 'for my academic use'. Also, adding a comma after 'Usually' improves sentence clarity.

× As it is, it has a very silent and good environment to study and research properly for my required topics.

✓ It has a very quiet and good environment to study and research properly for my required topics.

The adjective 'silent' is not typically used to describe an environment; 'quiet' is the appropriate adjective. Also, 'as it is' is unnecessary and can be omitted for clarity.

× No, when I was a child I used to play more outdoor games than having interest in my reading.

✓ No, when I was a child, I used to play more outdoor games than to have an interest in reading.

The phrase 'than having interest' is incorrect; the correct form is 'than to have an interest'. Also, adding commas improves readability.

× So that was the main reason which not because I hadn't go to the library as a childhood but I had the huge amount of source like books at my house.

✓ So that was the main reason, not because I hadn't gone to the library as a child, but because I had a huge amount of resources like books at my house.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction use and verb form. 'Hadn't go' should be 'hadn't gone' (past participle). Also, 'as a childhood' is incorrect; 'as a child' is correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× So I was having reading habits since my child.

✓ So I have had reading habits since my childhood.

The phrase 'since my child' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'since my childhood'. Also, 'was having' is incorrect for a habit continuing to present; 'have had' is appropriate.

× Yes, Chinese kids and many kids go often to the library because from the childhood since the childhood, parents teach their kids to have a reading habit daily.

✓ Yes, Chinese kids and many other kids often go to the library because since childhood, parents teach their kids to have a daily reading habit.

The phrase 'from the childhood since the childhood' is redundant and incorrect. 'Since childhood' is the correct expression. Also, 'go often' is better as 'often go'. 'A reading habit daily' is better as 'a daily reading habit'.

× This helps kids from the childhood onwards to make the reading habit proper and more efficient till they become adult.

✓ This helps kids from childhood onwards to develop a proper and more effective reading habit until they become adults.

The phrase 'make the reading habit proper and more efficient' is awkward; 'develop a proper and more effective reading habit' is better. 'Till they become adult' should be 'until they become adults'. Also, 'from the childhood' should be 'from childhood'.