Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и связным. Избегайте грамматических ошибок и неполных предложений. Используйте связующие слова для плавности речи и уточните детали, например, опишите, почему атмосфера мотивирует вас читать.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it has a quiet atmosphere that helps me concentrate. Moreover, I enjoy browsing through old-fashioned books while relaxing on comfortable chairs and sofas.

提案: Ответ не совсем ясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует структурировать ответ, используя связующие слова и уточняя детали, например, что именно вы делаете с книгами и почему это вам нравится.

例: Usually, I borrow books by Stephen King from the library because I enjoy his writing style. For example, at my school library, I borrowed seven of his books, which made me very happy.

提案: Ответ достаточно понятен, но можно сделать его более естественным и плавным, используя связующие слова и более точные выражения.

例: No, I didn't go to the library much when I was a kid because I wasn't as interested in reading as I am now.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие формулировки. Следует использовать правильную грамматику, избегать повторов и более конкретно объяснять свою точку зрения с помощью связующих слов.

例: I believe that many Chinese children are very clever and hardworking. Therefore, they often visit libraries to study and improve their knowledge.

× Yes, I love libraries because there are a silent atmosphere and you get motivation to read more.

✓ Yes, I love libraries because there is a silent atmosphere and you get motivation to read more.

The phrase 'there are a silent atmosphere' is incorrect because 'atmosphere' is singular and should be used with 'is' instead of 'are'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue. Use 'there is' for singular nouns.

× There are old fashioned books and. Coffee chairs and sofas.

✓ There are old-fashioned books, coffee chairs, and sofas.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. 'Old fashioned' should be hyphenated as 'old-fashioned' when used as an adjective before a noun. Also, the sentence should be combined properly with commas and conjunctions to list items clearly.

× Usually I take Stephen King's books and so in school library I took my first 7 Kings books and I was happy.

✓ Usually, I take Stephen King's books, and in the school library, I took my first seven King books and was happy.

The sentence is awkward and lacks proper punctuation. Adding commas improves readability. Also, '7' should be written as 'seven' in formal writing. The phrase 'and so' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× Usually I take Stephen King's books and so in school library I took my first 7 Kings books and I was happy.

✓ Usually, I take Stephen King's books, and in the school library, I took my first seven King books and was happy.

The verb 'took' is correctly in past tense for the past event. No correction needed here for tense, but the sentence structure was improved as above.

× No, not at all. When I was a kid, I didn't love reading that much as I love now.

✓ No, not at all. When I was a kid, I didn't love reading as much as I do now.

The phrase 'that much as I love now' is incorrect. The correct comparative structure is 'as much as I do now'. Also, 'love' should be in present tense 'do' to match the current state.

× I think Chinese kids is very and very clever people and hardworking people.

✓ I think Chinese kids are very clever and hardworking people.

'Kids' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'very and very' is redundant; 'very' once is sufficient. The phrase is simplified for clarity.

× And I think there are the kids often go to the library 'cause they're clever, yeah.

✓ And I think kids often go to the library because they're clever, yeah.

The phrase 'there are the kids often go' is incorrect. 'There are' is unnecessary here. Also, 'the kids' is not needed; 'kids' is sufficient. 'Cause' is informal; 'because' is preferred for clarity.