Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid informal contractions like 'cause' and be more concise. Also, avoid repeating 'books' unnecessarily. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with a reason.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading and discovering new authors.

提案: Your answer is good but could be clearer with better linking words. Also, avoid redundancy like 'read and explore new books' which is similar. Try to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Usually, I read books that help me prepare presentations, and I also enjoy discussing them with other readers.

提案: Be careful with grammar: 'when I was kids' should be 'when I was a kid'. Avoid repeating words like 'helped help'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid. I used to read comics and books, which I believe helped me become smarter as I grew up.

提案: Avoid informal language like 'cause' and repetitive phrases like 'go to the library'. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific reasons.

例: Yes, Chinese children often visit libraries because they value education and enjoy reading, which helps them excel academically.

× Yes, I went to the library when I was kids.

✓ Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid.

The word 'kids' is plural, but the subject 'I' is singular, so the singular form 'kid' should be used to match the subject.