Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, say "I often visit the library daily because it is a convenient place to access various books." Also, clarify your sentences and avoid mistakes like "My the library" and "went easily by the walk to the AT."

例: Yes, I often visit the library daily because it is a convenient place to access various books all under one roof. The library is near my house, so I usually walk there.

提案: Try to structure your answer with clear topic sentences and linking words. Also, correct grammar and use specific vocabulary. For example, say "I usually read comic books and work on my academic assignments. Additionally, I enjoy reading fairy tales, which are my favorite. I also look for health-related magazines placed on the upper shelves."

例: I usually read comic books and work on my academic assignments. Additionally, I enjoy reading fairy tales, which are my favorite books in the library. I also look for health-related magazines that are placed on the upper shelves.

提案: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say "Yes, I have been interested in visiting the library since my childhood because I enjoy reading different types of books. Therefore, I often spent my leisure time there."

例: Yes, I have been interested in visiting the library since my childhood because I enjoy reading different types of books. Therefore, I often spent my leisure time there.

提案: Your answer should be more concise and natural. Avoid vague phrases and improve grammar. For example, say "Yes, I think Chinese kids often visit the library daily because they are eager to learn new things. They like to read books during their leisure time."

例: Yes, I think Chinese kids often visit the library daily because they are eager to learn new things. They like to read books during their leisure time.

× Yes, I often visit to library on the daily basis as it is very convenient mode of gaining the knowledge from the different types of books under the one roof.

✓ Yes, I often visit the library on a daily basis as it is a very convenient mode of gaining knowledge from different types of books under one roof.

The preposition 'to' is not used after 'visit' in this context. Also, 'on the daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. 'The knowledge' should be 'knowledge' as it is uncountable here. 'The one roof' should be 'one roof' without 'the'. These corrections improve naturalness and grammatical accuracy.

× My the library is near my house so I went easily by the walk to the AT.

✓ My library is near my house so I can easily walk to it.

The phrase 'My the library' is incorrect; 'My library' suffices. 'I went easily by the walk to the AT' is awkward and unclear; it should be 'I can easily walk to it.' 'AT' is unclear and likely a typo or error. The correction clarifies meaning and fixes article misuse.

× In library I often read the books related to the comics and some of the my academic work.

✓ In the library, I often read books related to comics and some of my academic work.

The phrase 'In library' requires the definite article 'the' to become 'In the library'. 'The books' should be 'books' as it is general. 'The comics' should be 'comics' without 'the'. 'Some of the my academic work' is incorrect; it should be 'some of my academic work' without 'the'.

× I really love to read the fairy tales which are one of the my favorite book in the whole library.

✓ I really love to read fairy tales which are some of my favorite books in the whole library.

'The fairy tales' should be 'fairy tales' as a general category. 'One of the my favorite book' is incorrect; it should be 'some of my favorite books' because 'fairy tales' is plural. This corrects pronoun and number agreement.

× I always in search of magazines related to the health articles which are placed in the upper shelf of library.

✓ I am always in search of magazines related to health articles which are placed on the upper shelf of the library.

The sentence lacks the verb 'am' after 'I always'. 'Related to the health articles' should be 'related to health articles' without 'the'. 'In the upper shelf' should be 'on the upper shelf' as 'on' is the correct preposition for shelves. 'Of library' should be 'of the library' with the definite article.

× Yes, I have great interest in the in visiting the library since my childhood as I am very attractive towards the reading the different type of books, so I always prefer to spend my leisure time in the library.

✓ Yes, I have had great interest in visiting the library since my childhood as I am very attracted to reading different types of books, so I always prefer to spend my leisure time in the library.

'Have great interest' should be 'have had great interest' to indicate duration from past to present. 'In the in visiting' is incorrect; it should be 'in visiting'. 'Very attractive towards' is incorrect; it should be 'very attracted to'. 'The different type of books' should be 'different types of books' to match plural form.

× Yes, I think that Chinese kids usually prefer to visit the library on their daily basis because they have very sharp mind and they are very keen to learn about the new things.

✓ Yes, I think that Chinese kids usually prefer to visit the library on a daily basis because they have very sharp minds and they are very keen to learn new things.

'On their daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. 'Very sharp mind' should be plural 'very sharp minds' to agree with plural subject 'kids'. 'Learn about the new things' should be 'learn new things' for natural expression.

× So they always prefer to have some books in their leisure time.

✓ So they always prefer to read some books in their leisure time.

'Prefer to have some books' is awkward; 'prefer to read some books' is more natural. The preposition 'in their leisure time' is correct here.