Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat long and contains some redundancy. Try to be more concise and natural by directly answering the question first, then briefly explaining your reason. Also, avoid contradictory statements that may confuse the listener. For example, you say you have many books at home but also that you don't find reading interesting, which is unclear.

例: I don't often go to the library because I have many books at home that I enjoy reading. However, sometimes I prefer other activities, so I rarely visit the library.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using clearer tenses and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid repeating phrases like "as I said before." Try to directly answer and then add supporting details with linking words such as "for example" or "also."

例: I rarely go to the library, but when I do, I usually look for manga and other books that interest me. Also, if I have academic difficulties, I find reference books to help me study.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors, especially in the last sentence. Try to use past tense consistently and complete your thoughts. Also, avoid vague phrases like "or." Provide specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I often went to the library as a child because my parents believed reading would improve my mindset. For example, when they thought I needed to develop social skills, they bought me books on communication.

提案: Your answer is polite but could be more confident and direct. Also, improve grammar by using singular/plural agreement and avoid vague phrases like "I think." Use linking words to make your opinion clearer.

例: Although I am not Chinese, I believe that reading is important for children's development. Therefore, I think many Chinese kids often visit libraries to read and learn.

× I rarely go to the library because at my home there are plenty of books with diverse genre which allow me to stay at home and immerse in reading books.

✓ I rarely go to the library because at my home there are plenty of books with diverse genres which allow me to stay at home and immerse in reading books.

The word 'genre' should be plural 'genres' because it refers to multiple types of books. Using the singular form here is incorrect when talking about a variety of categories.

× However, I don't find reading book interesting, so if I had to go out, I would not go to the library.

✓ However, I don't find reading books interesting, so if I had to go out, I would not go to the library.

The noun 'book' should be plural 'books' because the activity of reading generally involves multiple books, not just one. Using the singular form here is unnatural.

× Also, if I'm struggle with my academic results, I will find some reference books.

✓ Also, if I struggle with my academic results, I will find some reference books.

The phrase 'I'm struggle' is incorrect because 'struggle' should be in its base form after 'if'. The auxiliary verb 'am' is not needed here. The correct form is 'if I struggle'.

× For example, when they believed that I need to enhance my social skills, they will would buy me some books or.

✓ For example, when they believed that I needed to enhance my social skills, they would buy me some books.

The sentence mixes past and conditional tenses incorrectly. 'Need' should be in past tense 'needed' to match 'believed'. Also, 'will would' is incorrect; only 'would' is needed for the conditional past. The sentence was also incomplete and has been corrected accordingly.

× Actually, I'm not a Chinese so I cannot comprehend all the culture there, but I believe that reading books are essential for all kids in their development.

✓ Actually, I'm not Chinese so I cannot comprehend all the culture there, but I believe that reading books is essential for all kids in their development.

The phrase 'a Chinese' is incorrect; 'Chinese' is an adjective or plural noun, so 'a' should be removed. Also, 'reading books are' is incorrect because 'reading books' is treated as a singular activity, so the verb should be 'is'.