Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but a bit informal and slightly redundant. Try to be more concise and natural by avoiding phrases like "to be honest with you" and "I'm not that type of person." Also, finish your sentences completely and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't go to the library often because I find ebooks more convenient. They allow me to access information quickly online, so I usually prefer studying on the Internet.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Avoid vague phrases like "educating groups" and finish your sentences fully. Use linking words to organize your ideas and provide specific details about your activities in the library.

例: In the library, people can search for books, do assignments, or join study groups. Personally, I like to go there to read novels because it's quiet and comfortable.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more natural by avoiding formal phrases like "If my memory serves well." Also, improve sentence flow by using linking words and correcting minor grammar issues.

例: I didn't go to the library often as a kid because my parents had many books at home. Since I loved novels and comic books, I could read them anytime without needing to visit the library.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more concise and natural. Avoid awkward phrases like "escape them from distractions." Use clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary to express your ideas.

例: In my opinion, because many homes in China are crowded, children often find it hard to concentrate at home. Therefore, many parents take their kids to libraries where they can study without distractions.

× I prefer to study with ebooks because I think that they are more convenient and you're more able to get information from online sites.

✓ I prefer to study with ebooks because I think that they are more convenient and you are more able to get information from online sites.

The contraction 'you're' is correct for 'you are', but in this context, the phrase 'you're more able to get information' is awkward. Expanding the contraction to 'you are' improves clarity and formality in this context.

× So I prefer Internet over.

✓ So I prefer the Internet.

The phrase 'prefer Internet over' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct structure is 'prefer the Internet' or 'prefer the Internet over something'. Here, 'the Internet' requires the definite article 'the' and the sentence should be complete.

× There are a lot of things that you can do in the library, such as searching or doing your assignments or participating in groups, educating groups.

✓ There are a lot of things that you can do in the library, such as searching, doing your assignments, or participating in study groups.

The phrase 'educating groups' is incorrect and unclear. The correct term is 'study groups'. Also, the list should be separated by commas and the conjunction 'or' before the last item for proper sentence structure.

× I myself prefer to get there in order to read novels and.

✓ I myself prefer to go there in order to read novels.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought. Also, 'get there' is less appropriate than 'go there' when referring to visiting a place. The corrected sentence completes the idea properly.

× my parents had a great collection of books in home and I was obsessed with novels and comic books, so I was able to reach them without going to libraries.

✓ my parents had a great collection of books at home and I was obsessed with novels and comic books, so I was able to reach them without going to libraries.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to one's home. The correct preposition is 'at home'. This is a common prepositional error.

× From my point of view, since the overpopulation in China is so remarkable, children cannot focus and study in their home, so lots of parents take their children to libraries in order to escape them from distractions.

✓ From my point of view, since the overpopulation in China is so remarkable, children cannot focus and study at home, so lots of parents take their children to libraries in order to help them escape distractions.

The phrase 'study in their home' should be 'study at home' for correct preposition usage. Also, 'escape them from distractions' is incorrect; it should be 'help them escape distractions' to convey the intended meaning clearly.